We will survive with the portions that the kind heart has to start
all are not worst we have the good you can chose
Nice poem I liked the beginning and the endings
so I shall repeat :
I am the Blue whale of the oceans,
the largest being to have lived ever.
Only few of us still swim today,
because man turned out to be clever.
Forever is a day
Longing for tomorrow
God please, come back here, do not disappear
that is a nice one i guess and your repetition of the lines gave a firmness and i think i should say this way for you:
God is here and God is there
He stays and lives everywhere
Love is not Cruel Human shall grow it well!!!
"I have been on the waves,
and in the rain,
and on the snow,
and in the clouds.
And their colors will shine brighter because of it."
May be its the moon but after reading the whole poem i got it just having a self entity that roams around all and none sees it at all.I love some lines and hope you continue them:
"The world is full of colors and yet my shade is unique.
I am often called silver, but the name sticks to my tongue.
It doesn't have the right flavor
and cannot compliment my palette.
For there is so much more to me than silver."
" I am an extension of the colors of summer.
I fall like rain and settle softly around their proud bold tones.
I wrap my silver strands around them
and frost their colors
making them sparkle and dance brighter in the light."
HOPE YOU SEE MY WRITING.BEST OF LUCK.
The way you have written has given me a new way to look at my own writing. the selection of the tittle and the starting seem to be great to me and i am reading further of the story. the way of wring is really simply worthy to review. hope to have mor mind controling writing from you. GOOD LUCK!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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