Your writing flows flawlessly as each sentence leads seamlessly into the next. The only point in the story where it seems to puzzle me is where Sam was brought back to the house and actually fell asleep in spite of the obvious pain that she was in. I was also a little put off by the conflict of the initial description of how the bone had torn through her leg and the subsequent "setting" of the bone socket. I think that you should look over these few details.
I never cease to be amazed by how men tend to see their penis as a separate entity. It's like the male member has a symbiant quality. I don't readily see any room for improvement here. It's very clever and honest. I feel for the woman who must comply...unless you decide to make it interesting!
You are so sweet, wise and understanding. Thank you for this very fine article. I will bear these things in mind if I ever come across someone who is in need of assistance during a seizure.
I hate that your lovely wife has to go through that. At least she has you.
Hi!! I'm serena and I have been a member for only about a couple of weeks. I am addicted to this website! My daughter knows that when she sees this colorful yellow screen on my computer that I am officailly in another world.
I am a high school English teacher who is fairly new to the business. My passion has always been directed toward writing. Many of my former teachers have encouraged me to write, but no ever told me just how to get started. I think that the Nike slogan says it all-Just Do It!
I am still learning the ins and outs of the site.
Today, 3/27/04, I saw a merit badge given for the best erotic writer. I closed it(the browser) by mistake and I can't remember the name of the author or the article. I believe that I will recognize both when I see them again. Can anybody help me out?
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