Great poem! I lost a dog and I felt the same way. :(
You expressed your feelings excellently! (Made me remember the time I lost my dog *sob*)
They say a writer writes best about things they've been through and its a true statement.
The only things that I found which needed to be fixed were
1. The second line "Black fur brown eyes just looking at me," you repeat the first four words in different stanzas. To fix this, remove "Black fur brown eyes," and leave "Just looking at me," in it.
2. Spelling mistakes: 3rd Stanza, line 2. Fix the word "tough," to "tongue." 4th Stanza, line 3. Capitalize the word "spiderman," because it is a noun. 7th Stanza, line 2. Fix the word "can," to "came."
3. Did you mean to have the word "Most," capitalized to make more of an impact when it was read? If so, no need to fix it! ^-^
Good job and best of luck on your next masterpiece!
Good job! This describes quite a lot about your perspective on books. I'm an avid reader so I understand the importance of literature! ^-^
The rhymes helped make things feel more fluent and added a little "spice" to it.
You have good grammar and spelling, which is important for writing/typing!
Good luck on your future stories/poems!
It was great! I loved how you set the mood and tone making it feel depressing at first but then leaving that little light at the end of the tunnel!
If I were to choose something to improve on, it would be grammar and punctuation. Although I felt that you were pouring your emotions into this beautiful piece hastily.
Good job on this one, I hope to see more!
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