Great story., Really made me think bout religious diversity. I'll be sure to act as open minded as I am. Good description and really well written. You managed to put a very important moral in a very small place. You also project the voice of this disgruntled man very well.
A wonderful tale and very well written. Good brief description. You capture the esscence of shyness very well (I would know hahah). Scares me because I relate to this a lot with the exception that I'm still very young. Very emotional and gripping after the transition. Most definitly leaves you something to walk away with. I'll have to read something peachy now! Supergoodwork!
Good with the few paragraphs but at the sexual bits it became weird. I don't really see what you were getting at and I can't help but think that the end was sort of less thought out than the rest. Good concept though and well written.
Straight up money girl. I enjoy this poems solidity like it really states how you're not gonna change for any superficial or popular reasons. Format's a good choice for the stuffs you speak of.
Now the ill. Capitalization, "Fortunately i am strong" and "Fortunately i am a hard worker." Once you get that little stuff out it really helps the flow.
Good work, really enjoyed it, wish there were more opinions like yours out there.
Good poem. Definitly relatable and pretty heartwrenching. I can't help but feel that with a bit better vocabulary this poem would really excell. Mostly so as to really define that sorrow you felt.
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