Great story. I liked it a lot! I loved that the writing wasn't bogged down by too many adult explanations- you did a great job maintaining a child' perspective. I might have enjoyed a few more details about the era. More sights, sounds, smells.... Although, I think in my own writing I may go overboard with TOO many descriptions! LOL
Maybe you might read my story and tell me what you think? #1809633
It's called Sunstroke.
Thanks so much, and I look forward to reading more of your work!
Skinny Girl
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