Ah yes, the trials and tribulations of being a teenager. I liked this poem because it was short and to the point. It very clearly represents the aspects most important to a teenager on the cusp of manhood: food, cars, and books. Probably love (or lust) would have been a good addition to the list too but I still thought it was good.
I also found it interesting that he is able to recognize that not all of us can get out of life what we want, when we want it. Though it was his birthday he knew his breakfast was limited to a grapefruit.
This story is jolting (in a good way) for several different reasons. Not only does it make the reader examine the line between reality and fiction but it also makes a powerful statement about accountability. I found it very tragic that Jacob had to keep reliving the accident over and over again without fail though as if being punished for his actions.
I thought you were able to paint a vivid picture of the accident and both victims (Jacob and the strange man).
Ooh! That was chilling! I loved the imagery of the narrator. I also really enjoyed how death was portrayed as a woman. It's a rare occasion to see death portrayed as a gentle spirit because of our society's commercialism of scythes and black hoods but this story painted a very different picture. The realization of the true identity of the woman at the end when narrator's thoughts became clear was disturbingly peaceful, not at all what a person might expect when looking death in the face.
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