The imagery is vivid, and sets a strong atmosphere.
The intimate tone works well for the story's subjective.
Could possible be expanded upon, having more clarity in the transitions so they aren't as abrupt. The repetitiveness of "the flame" reinforces the subject but could be changed to avoid redundancy. The grammar and writing style could be tightened and less complex.
“The flame lights the flame inside us, that we often forget is there.” is a disjointed in terms of punctuation.
Your story is both compelling and heartfelt, capturing the deep essence of human connection, especially in a world filled with distractions.
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