I loved the story! But I do not mean to be rude when I say you want to go back and fix grammar errors. For instance, when you said, "No._______." You want to put a comma behind No and keep the sentence flowing. Also some sentences are incomplete. Just leaving silly little words out like you or and. But other than small errors, the story was very interesting and kept me in hooked. It kind of reminds of the movie "P.S. I Love You".
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