The story 'Candies of Change' shows promise as a wonderful way to branch out of the norm and provide a new twist on wish granting, allowing outside parties to interject, making the story more meable. My problem with the story is simply that instead of two or three definitive choices, it gives two or three very broad choices, which in part, lead to more choices. This isn't a very good way to keep the story moving. Also, there are a few too many chapters with poor sentense structue and bad balence. That being said, there are also quiet a few good chapters writen by talented authors, and I would still recomend this story for any reader's enjoyment.
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