I enjoyed the comparison and your development of the wild animals metaphore!
some thoughts I would add --
-did you intend purposely to switch audiences from "we" to "you" to "people"? It sounds like "people" is used as to represent the student examples in parts of the 3rd and 4th paragraph, but in how you address the audience, you may want to keep the "we's" and "you's" a bit more uniform.
-something fun you could do to emphasize your point is actually using the word "animal" instead of people when using examples! it would sound more fun to me.
-another suggestion would be to use as many animal-type words as possible when describing the student's behavior. you do some of this, but it would be fun to perhaps overdue it somewhat in a very exaggerated way.
overall, loved it!
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