I really like the way this piece flows, almost like breathing. I'm sure who exactly the subject of this piece is to the narrator, but I think its really good that you managed to incorporate a sense of a best friend as well as a lover in the subject.
You do have one spelling error, 5th stanza line 2, it reads 'non' instead of 'now'.
Overall, very good poem. I'm glad I read it, and I'll probably think about it for a while.
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