Real cute story, and good use of dialogue. But in my oppinion...and this is just oppinion...it couldve used alot more description, and although I really, and I stress the really, liked the use of the songs and their effect on the conversation...you may or may not want to use less songs...in terms of time, you hear one song, lets say average that out to three minutes a song....those two were sitting there for a good twenty minutes, and not all that much was said considering each piece of dialogue was sparked by a song lyric. But thats just me being anal, but what can I say, I love anal. lol...But its a nice story, and its even better since its a true life love story is it not?
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