Thank you for this. It gets right down to it....it is not pretty and hard to read and really really good. Technically it is good. Good meter and rythm and rhyme. I only see one small item you might want to change. I think you meant to say "and I seal the envelope" instead of real. But it was a great poem.
Now...speaking as a recovering addict. There needs to be more of this out there. More expressions of what it is like down at the bottom. Down there where you can't find anything good in your life. It is important for others to know that it can and does get better. Thank you for being brave enough to write this and post it here for us to read. You are a great poet...please keep writing.
Thank you again
I really liked the message in the poem. It is well written. I have one suggestion, and please realize that this is just my own personal opinion, what your meter. For me it is important to really watch your meter. When changing your line length and stanza length it is really hard to establish a meter because there are different number of feet each line and stanza. So it can cause your reader to struggle when reading it because their mind it trying to find patterens. I understand that in free verse this does not always apply but it makes it easier for your readers. But I loved the poem. Thank you for writing and posting it.
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