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Review of Hunter's Creed  Open in new Window.
for entry "Chapter 1" Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
This reads well. The story is believable to me. I like the characters especially the ghost. I do wonder what is going on in the town. I am concerned about the way the villagers act. It is clear that there is more going on than greedy farmers. Greedy farmers would not keep children from playing.


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Review of The Skirt  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Awesome! Well polished! Defiance well shown. I doubt I can write a review adequate to express the quality of this story. You captured the before and after of an iconic moment in history. The point where women take the first steps towards finding their equality and freedom.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Cool story. I missed the prompt. I would have probably chosen Dobby. I love yours though. It seems very true to the world and the characters. Lee seemed just as reckless and brave as Harry and as compassionate. Too bad the book was not from his point of view.
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for entry "Fools Be Free" Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Short and to the point. I like it but I am not sure it is a full story really, it does not seem to have a real plot to it. He just sits on the hill. Okay he sees everything but what all does he see and what does he think about any of that stuff. He is an interesting character but, I am left wanting more.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Wild story! You were really naughty. But it sounds like it was worth it! And there was no real harm. I am glad you got to discover their gratitude and were able to share it with the other veterans out there. Because that kind of thing is why they take the risks they do. I just wish their was equivalent gratitude for all of our wars.
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Review of Take my hand  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
What a sweet inspirational poem. It is very much about hope from the beginning. Hope shown not told, in such a beautiful way, it gave me warm fuzzies. There is not a distinct sex given to the adult or child which gives it universal appeal for me. It could be a mother or father or even grandmother elevating a child of either gender. It could be my nephew or your grand daughter it could be any of us.
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Review of Activities Blog  Open in new Window.
for entry "Dr Jake" Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hilarious!!! 🤣🤣🤣 I did not see that last line coming, but when it got here I dropped my phone i laughed so hard. The lead up to that last line was so perfect I had to read it aloud to my wife. She looked at me weird until I read the last line. Then she laughed her as-trologist off.
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Review of The Umbrella  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Creepy the umbrella takes possession of its bearer to what end? I wonder what happens when the rain stops. Or is the umbrella causing the rain. It has planned its next bearer probably has its endgame planned out too. There are so many ways to expand this into something more.
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Rated: 18+ | N/A (Review only item.)
This is an interesting poem. It warps reality a bit for me. It is almost as if you are personifying the muffin. I really like it. It made me hungry. It made me think of muffins and their pure, simple enjoyability. It really is well written in my opinion. Though the notes on the poem should probably be better separated from the poem. They confused me at first. Until I realized that they were notes.
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Review of Promptly Poetry  Open in new Window.
for entry "Write and Live" Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Nice poem! Mine for this week sucks! Your's looks like any ordinary poem that just flowed out of you onto paper effortlessly. Like inspiration struck and wham bam thank you ma'am you have an good poem sitting in front of you. I struggled to get down something terrible.
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
What a sweet Christmas story. I loved the characters they were vivid even the dead grandpa. The setting was clear in my mind. Or should I say settings? I don't usually like a bunch of scene and pov changes in a story that short. But the transitions were smooth and clear and totally necessary. It was really well written and smooth from beginning to the end I loved it. I have come to expect quality writing from you and this did not disappoint in the least bit. It was a bit unseasonable for a summer read. It would be even better if I were looking out the window at a snow storm.
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
This is a really nice story. It builds in tension from the first line. I do not know why they are down there. But they do seem to have a serious purpose. I almost want to say this is post-zombie apocalypse. Like they are traveling by sewer because it is safer. Or would have been safer. Then I read it is children and I have to attribute it to a lesser situation. It is well written. In my humble opinion you should have won the contest if you did not.
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
That's a grizzly story. A little goryer than I typically like them. But it was not gratuitous gore. Every drop of blood and flesh and whatever the red stuff really was belonged there and it would have made the story less vibrant to leave it out. As usual another great thrill ride.
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Review of The Well  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Cute story, I was waiting the whole time for a jump scare that never happened. I think this is a story that little hooligans with ideas about wells need to read. To satisfy their curiosity before something bad happens. What if pa had not been so close?
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Good scene, but you got your their, there, they're mixed up in the first paragraph. Not a big, just change their to there. Also if there is nothing beyond the city but void, where did the plane come from? And where do they get their food from? Just a couple of thoughts.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Good story so far, but it seems a little rushed. Take a little more time, give us some vivid details. Make us see, smell, hear the city more. You've got space. And time, we'll all wait especially if what you add is as thrilling as what you've already got down.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I love it. Your caricatures of each of the colors were perfect. I think you chose their personalities perfectly. Their moods affecting their instruments of creativity is genius. I love how the dominating red is brought down a few pegs into a slot of cooperation. This is a great story and I understand how you won this prompt. Make sure to add a note about winning to your notes.
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Review of The Shame  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
This is a good start to something longer. You could make it a story about recovery. Or rediscovery she could find who she was after the trauma. Or she could go psycho Rambo on the gang that hurt her. Totally taking a complete and satisfying revenge on them.
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Good job, definitely twisted and dark. I would put a link to the contest and prompt, also if possible a linked to or written out the original song all into a pop or drop note. Just so people can fully get where it came from. It is well written and I think it has a chance of winning, so if it does don't forget to come back and update the note.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Awesome story! I am so glad you could help her heal herself like that! Sometimes the results of s simple act of kindness can lead you to find a beautiful treasure. It sounds like her creations were only a part of the treasure she found because of your kindness!
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Review of Haven  Open in new Window.
for entry "A Normal Life" Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Awesome story! I like the main character! A lot more than i thought i would at first. At first i almost hated her for keeping the rich rich. Then the meeting about the cartel showed how upright and honorable she was. That is a great deal of character growth/ presentation for such a short story. On the way through the story to the end more and more is revealed about her character. It is a deep and nuanced story. I did get a little confused about the two characters names maybe i lost focus reading or maybe you slipped up. Any way around it you should double check that it is clear which is speaking when. Overall i would read it again.
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Review of The Coven  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | N/A (Review only item.)
That's creepy., and a definite lesson for anyone stupid enough to mess with the forces of darkness. It is well written. I would try highlighting the prompt words by bolding them so the reader can see them, since I wanted to see how successful you were with the prompt. I think I caught them but...
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
The first thing this poem made me think of were the poems that strike almost fully formed in the twilight thoughts right before you fall asleep. The kind that beg you to write them down but you pay them on the hand and assure them that you will remember them in the morning and then give in to sleep. Morning comes and the have evaporated into a lingering mist. Unable to recall them, you make a silent promise never to let it happen again.
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Review of Cold Wind in May  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
That is a vivid poem. Appreciate the skill with which you put it together. It is relatively short yet it tells a complete story of a lovely spring day. I know this was a writer's cramp entry. Might I suggest a drop or pop note with a link to the cramp, date, prompt, and the fact that you won. Those are all things you might want to remember later.
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Review of The Stick man  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
THat was truely creepy. It was a slow but predictable creep. I still hit me with a thump as I read the note even though I felt something like that coming. Like it but not exactly it. There is one thing double check that your spelling of Shawn is consistent through the story, it felt like the spelling in the last paragraph was a mistake.
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