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for entry "Faux-ku" Open in new Window.
Review by Rainy Day Sox Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
It fits the prompt. It does feel like a haiku. I liked the title. Faux-ku that worked really well for me. It is actually what decided me on reading this. One thing in terms of looks, I always prefer to put my prompt, author notes and link to the activity in a drop or pop note.
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Rated: 18+ | N/A (Review only item.)
Cool. I think this is cool it reminds me of the TARDIS in doctor who, it is selective about who enters it when it is left unattended. That and the bigger on the inside vibe of it. I have read two chapters and want very much to read more. It is a great beginning.
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
This is an intriguing start. It introduces the characters and their world well. The verbal affectation in the dialog clearly places the boys in the uneducated lower class of their world. I am not too clear on what world that is, whether it is our own at another time or a completely different one. I like the element of magic and the idea of the sea mother.
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Review of Ode to the Earth  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Lovely, the rhymes all work for me without any really strained ones. I enjoyed the message and the way you reminded me that we are a part of the earth not separate from it it feels like sometimes even the environmentalists do not remind us of that. Some even act like we are separate from the efforts to save the world. Do less farming nevermind that people would starve.
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Review of Consume me  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a very passionate poem. I have heard of all consuming love before but I feel like it is healthier when both people are equally consumed by the love becoming something more, better. The one-sided nature of this poem should beg not to be abused but the poet does not care I could see an agonizing breakup ahead.
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Review of The Indian  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Awesome story. I figured it was something like a fatal condition. He wanted to take the robber out before he got too sick to get him. It reads and flows well. I didn't mind that it wasn't pc because to be that gritty and authentic it could not be. Excellent story!
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Review of The Forever Dream  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Reminds me of a round like you sing and with every verse you add another voice. Row row to your boat... Build another raft merrily merrily merrily life just sucks like a--. It is a cool story and I got into it from the beginning. I have had dreams like this where no matter what I tried I could not wake up.this captures the feeling perfectly.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Like this poem. No surprise that it won it's contest. I do prefer my authors notes like the one belonging to this item to be in a drop note or pop note, though I can't fault the change in text color. I does separate the two segments. I just think drop notes are prettier.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is an amazing activity that encourages participation in so many areas of the site. This is definitely in the top four activities on the site. Right up there with the I write challenge and the contest challenge. Like them you can jump in any time and catch up.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Wow, great story. It is just perfect. The lead up left you wondering just where it could be going then you hit us in the face with Chaplin's ghost. I like that she was struck silent it seemed appropriate. I want him to talk to tell a long story but that just would not be right. Great ending!
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Review of Faith in Action  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a lovely well thought out piece. It is everything that it should be. Not just a blind profession of faith but one that is well supported by scriptures. I think you have expressed yourself very well. And the formatting is perfect. Lead with a quote and then come round to support it. Great job!
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is adorable, yet high brow. A communist bunny? I would have gone the Easter bunny route on this prompt. Actually I still might. this stort is highly inspiring I love it. The one thing is the 's should be "s and they should be on the same lines as the dialog.
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Review of The Uninvited Hat  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Creepy, foul, gross, what a wonderful way to approach the idea of a zombie. Start with a zombie hat then follow with the chaser of its owner. I would not have opened the door the second time. That was his second mistake. The first was not throwing the hat back outside.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Awesome story!I had times like that in my family. My sister and I had an old tape recorder and 1 tape. We would record ourselves acting out little stories with our my little pony toys with plastic dinosaurs as the villains. We would listen to that tape and then tape over the stories with new ones. The characters became very detailed. This story reminded me of those stories and the times before my family fell apart. Thanks.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Lovely poem. Very lyrical. It tells so many stories in so few words. The rhymes aren't forced and fit exactly where they should be.it awesomely fits the prompt. I would put in a drop or pop note telling about where the poem came from, writer's cramp prompt and date.
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Review of Legends are born  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Ooh sounds like something i really want to read! It definitely hooked me! the alien names are just enough to tell you we aren't talking a local tale. The suspense in the last sentence is perfect and I liked the poetic nature of the last bit. It has just the right number of words.
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Review of Adriana's Tale  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Ew that's gross and terrifying and really impossible to look away from, like a particularly bad car accident. The creature was scary playing on every fearful characteristic I can think of, venom, spiders, alienness, it is just creepy
I wondered from the beginning how she would kill it. And I love that she used lightning!
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Awesome poem. I feel like that a lot because I have trouble believing anyone could find something in me worth loving. Sometimes a mirror on the wall is a liar and you must see your reflection in another human being's eyes to see the truth. I would put your note on the poem in a drop or pop note so that it doesn't take away from the power of the poem.
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
That would be a scary fortune cookie. Audits are nothing to sneeze at. The government makes all the rules, and if they say you owe, they can get it out of you one way or another, even in ways they do not allow other debtors. They can take your house, your car, and even auction off personal items. Best to pay what they say when they say or you will pay more in interest and penalties.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Okay, it is pretty good. definite conflict with nature over the rain. the main character isn't as clear in my mind as he could be. Dialog is good but so is description. Yes his words illustrate his character but a little more description of his actions would be good.

THe format of this story and poem are a little confusing. It is hard to tell where the paragraphs start and stop. Also in short stories Dialog looks more like, ( So and so said, "I said this." then you end the paragraph and you have the second person respond. Other person said, "My response is ..." or "My response is..." THe other person said.) the key is making sure there is a clear paragraph break between the words spoken by different characters. On this site it is a good idea to put two returns between paragraphs to make things clear, the tab key does nothing in the text boxes.
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Review of A Favor  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Yeah, a little predictable on the name chosen, but it is a good story. One thing the bard down in Stratford was a lot later in history than merlin and Arthur. That really threw me out of the story. It lost believability for me somewhere in that. I would leave out the mention of the young writer.
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Surreal action. I wish it were possible but it sounds really fun and cool. I wish I had the balls to jump out of a window like that. I admire her for her great faith. It is an encouraging story that shows God works in ways one would not expect. That is the only way a jury-rigged contraption like that would work for anyone but MacGyver
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Review of The Diagnosis  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Cool short story, not cool what is happening to Rylan. But it is an early diagnosis and the doctor seems hopeful. I felt you made a good use of the prompt phrase. I did not see it coming but when it arrived it made good sense. What was the reason for the alternate font used earlier in the piece?
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Rated: E | (5.0)
That is sooo cute! I love the animals, they are such characters. I didn't know hogs liked the taste of turkey either. Daisy is especially cool. She is smarter than I thought a cow would be, but the way you wrote her it seems perfectly natural that she would be that smart. There are a couple of places where the formatting is a little off, paragraphs with returns in the middle of them and places where another return is needed between paragraphs.
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Review of Lake Bonewater  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
The long blank space after the story was suitably ominous. Definitely a lovely horror tale. Poor Charlie. To have been transformed unwillingly into a monster and the to be murdered because of it that leaves the two scientists deserving of every horror they will reap.
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