A really great read. I understand the character, as if he has fallen for the sublime value of the moon.
The title for a moment had me a little dumbfounded, an then I realised its function as a double entendre and it made me smile.
You express such a range of human emotion in your poem. I like the way that your mind and body are metaphorical through the elements, especially water. Water is one of the most destructive forces of nature. I feel you have captivated it's character; it's ability to smooth over unpleasant times and its ability to completely devastate, yet also heal.
very nicely written, you really create a sense of the three voices having their own characters. Favourite for me has to by the shadow's stanza.
Keep up the good work.
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