This is certainly an interesting story.
It seems like it definitely has metaphorical overtones (or undertones?) of describing human emotions - more specifically "love" or loss of love? Introspection perhaps?
I enjoyed the story - it made me think (which is a good characteristic of an "abstract" story like this).
It could use some work on the grammar and sentence structure - that would make it a bit easier for the reader. It would also make the story flow better. I don't think it needs anything in regards to the "content" but would benefit from an editor going through it and simply cleaning it up a bit.
I do really like the story and enjoyed reading it! Write on.
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