Why is it a short story? I have enjoyed so much! I didn't pick up the phone while reading because I wanted to get to the end of it. I think you have plenty of material there to make it a novel. So thank you very much for this delicacy. I hope you write more about Rhonda and "oily grin".
I enjoyed reading your short story! You have great imagination and your writing took me right there in this dusty old town. I followed along Henry until the last squeeze. By the way the "kindness" weapon was a great idea. An idea to teach to many. Looking forward for your next piece
I have to say that you have great imagination! I don't know how much time you spent thinking about each character but kudos for that. The detailed log of each weapon is awesome. Reading about these descriptions I almost forget about the story. I don't know if it is a good point or not? You decide ;)
I am wondering why these strangers come to THIS table in THIS tavern. You have to tell us more!
Thanks for the nice trip,
R
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