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Review of The Presentation  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi LauraAnneMarie,
I pretty new at reviewing still so I hope my thoughts are helpful to you.
I think you did a good job tapping into the fear of giving presentations. I liked the rock climbing image. It also served to introduce a little more information about the character's background.
I’m curious to read more about the mysterious figure in the audience. Who are they? What are they doing there? Its a good hook that you could go just about anywhere with at this point. So I think it would be worth developing :) good luck!
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Review of Nightmares  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
This gave me chills. It grabs attention from the start and pulls the reader along through several interesting twists.
The good, bad guy was very creative and mysterious and made me want to know more. I liked your descriptions too, crackling, whispering, tastes and sounds. It made it easy to picture the scenes.
I thought it was kind of hard to get a feel for the character of the person who was kidnapped because there was little information about them personally. I kept trying to place who they were during the story, young or old, man or woman, but maybe that works well cause then it helps with the dream quality.
Anyway hope the feedback was useful. Thanks for sharing.
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