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Rated: E | (1.0)
Don't ever be in a rush! Develop your story and make it easy to read. To a reader short sentences are like punches to the face. Spelling and grammar can be fixed but you must let the story flow and above all you must have a story!
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Rated: E | (3.0)
Hi Sum1,
Your poem is pleasant and tells a story that entertains. Try removing some unnecessary words, for example: “Joshua!” While not said aloud (it) was heard by all

I was looking forward for a stronger outcome, maybe a surprise ending.
Add a little spice to go from good to great!
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