This is a great story. The characters were well developed and their interactions were interesting. Your writing style was vivid and easily allowed me to imagine the very scenes that were being described. If I knew anybody that would like this kind of story, I would recommend this immediately.
Great story! A little rushed in terms of the relationship between the two characters but sweet none the less. The writing was clear and concise while still being descriptive. I was smiling as the man was struggling to find an acceptable answer to the woman's question. A recommendation for future stories is to develop the story a little more thoroughly.
The overall concept for this story has been executed perfectly. There are not any options in the story that do not make sense. Each option has a reason for being there and fits the overall tone of the story. The only downside to the story is that the concept is one that I have seen many times before.
This was interesting, I guess. The beginning of the story made me think that it was going to be some kind of life is a video game story but then it went in a different direction and I got lost. The writing was good but I didn't enjoy the content. If I knew someone who liked this kind of stuff, I would recommend this story to them but it's not my cup of tea.
This was an amusing story. The concept of washing up on a deserted island with nothing but party favors is interesting to think about and presents an interesting idea for a survival challenge that people would ask each other. I would use the plastic bags to make a solar still.
This was interesting to say the least. I was surprised by the story's content because the summary didn't give me the impression that this was going to have mature content. It didn't make me think badly of the story but it was a surprise. Your writing style is great and easy to understand.
This is an interesting story. Most stories of princesses being locked up in a dungeon have the bad guy as someone unrelated (genetically speaking) to the princess in question, so this was an interesting twist. If this story was expanded into a full on short story, I would imagine it as being just as good as this poem was.
"Meh" story but it is a little confusing at times concerning when during the trip the story is taking place. I personally wouldn't read this again if I didn't have to due to not really finding any of it interesting. There were a few quirks in your grammar that bothered me a little and I didn't think much of it at all.
Great story. I actually guessed halfway through the POV was that of a bug's and was really happy when I found I was right. Anyways, the story was great and the idea was rather unique. Your writing gave enough details that I was able to tell what was going on without including too much so as to make this confusing. Overall, this was something I enjoyed.
This was mildly entertaining. I chuckled at the ending a bit and at the part where the money was stolen. Your writing was good albeit there was a mistake towards the beginning. Overall, I can't say I regretted reading it but I felt like this could have been much more entertaining.
This was great. I am usually more into sci-fi than fantasy but this excerpt was very intriguing and made me actually want to read the rest of this. The names you had for everything were very unique and made the universe the story is set in very original. Your writing was great and descriptive without being too much like really vague and hard to understand poetry. If my brother were to read this, I'm sure he would agree with me in saying this is a great work of fantasy literature.
Interesting story. I have never seen something like this before and the idea of having nature talk to me while I was hunting is rather unique. Your writing style is clear and concise without being boring. If this was the prelude to a book series, I would actually think about reading that series.
Interesting story. I've seen the idea of slime people being partnered with humans used in some of the interactive stories on the site but this is one of the first standalone stories with it that I've seen. You also added a few interesting ideas that I have not seen before. Your grammar was some of the best I've seen on the site and your style of writing was great.
Good story, great usage of descriptive words, no mistakes with the spelling or grammar that I can see, overall a great piece. I liked how you used your own life and your own experiences to inspire this piece. Normally poetry doesn't interest me but this actually made me smile. It conveyed an idea without being overly boring.
Good idea for the story, diverse options on what the reader can do using the wand and no really confusing wording. Grammar is some of the best I have seen so far on this website. I really think that you should be able to choose whether or not you are male or female. That would give the story a bit of a curve ball as guys might have more raunchy ideas on what to do with the wand.
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