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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
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Contest entry last modified-- 20st May
Word count--Exactly 55 words.
Content rating-- Appropriate

Plot and content: A man reflects on his car before ramming a ship threatening his planet.

Technical errors: None noted. Thanks for your careful attention to spelling, punctuation, and grammar!
Overall: An interesting story. It did take a couple reads to fully understand it. I think the issue is that it went from the guy reflecting, to a massive ship in the sky, to the guy in a star ship. Every paragraph is starkly different. I know 55 words are tough, but if you could introduce the guys predicament into the first sentence I think the story would have a bit more cohesion.

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