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Format: Contest entry last modified-- 20st May Word count--Exactly 55 words. Content rating-- Appropriate
Plot and content: A man reflects on his car before ramming a ship threatening his planet.
Technical errors: None noted. Thanks for your careful attention to spelling, punctuation, and grammar! Overall: An interesting story. It did take a couple reads to fully understand it. I think the issue is that it went from the guy reflecting, to a massive ship in the sky, to the guy in a star ship. Every paragraph is starkly different. I know 55 words are tough, but if you could introduce the guys predicament into the first sentence I think the story would have a bit more cohesion.
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