The only line I didn't get was the first line in the 2nd stanza. You should be very proud of this poem. I enjoyed the read so much. The 3rd stanza was my favorite. Well done!
Nancy (prophet)
A sweet story. In the 2nd paragraph (and wondered if he was lonely and rationalized) I would replace the 2nd and with then. I liked your "tethered by an unseen rubber band" I was left wondering about Jumpy which seemed like the main chacter to me. I would have liked it if the whole story had been centered around him. I liked your expression and the way you put your words together.
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