The following is my humble feedback on your work:-
The Language: Easy to understand. I also appreciate the effort taken by you to make the alternate lines rhyme.
The Plot: A heart wrenching poem on the sacrifice of a soldier on a foreign land where he dies unsung and forgotten.
What I enjoyed? Your poem stirred up deep emotional feelings within me. It is true that we take our freedom for granted and rarely appreciate the sacrifice that goes behind it. Sacrifices made by ordinary men and women many of whom suffer in silence.
Friendly Suggestions: None.
I give a 5 rating to all stories I review so as to not diminish the appeal of your story for other readers. My actual rating is also 5.
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The Language: Colorful and vivid.
The Plot: A poem on the beauties of nature
What I enjoyed? This was a refreshing small piece describing the myriad treasures of Mother Earth. I particularly liked the fact that your poem dwelled on the jewels concealed in the depths of the ocean. I enjoyed the use of colors in your poem - turquoise, yellow, pink, blue, green etc.
Friendly Suggestions: None
I give a 5 rating to all stories I review so as to not diminish the appeal of your story for other readers. My actual rating is also 5.
The following is my humble feedback on your work:-
The Language: Easy to understand.
The Plot: A humorous tale where a mother and her son bicker over and accuse each other of something for which neither of them is responsible.
What I enjoyed? I liked the argument between the son and mother and the funny way in which it ended. It is avoid to read about such nice family dramas in an age where most families are drifting apart.
Friendly Suggestions: None
I give a 5 rating to all stories I review so as to not diminish the appeal of your story for other readers. My actual rating is 4.5.
The following is my humble feedback on your work:-
The Language: Easy to understand.
The Plot:A spooky tale of a woman who meets a strange lady in a decrepit house who insists on calling her a sister. Both women are trapped by a monstrous male.
What I enjoyed? The story piqued my curiosity and I would be keen to know the identity of the characters. Your descriptions are graphic.
Friendly Suggestions:You may consider cutting down on the violence. It made me uncomfortable.
I give a 5 rating to all stories I review so as to not diminish the appeal of your story for other readers. My actual rating is 4.
The following is my humble feedback on your work:-
The Language: Easy to understand.
The Plot: A story in the fantasy genre where an accursed couple transfer their curse to an unsuspecting pair of lovers.
What I enjoyed? This is such a sad tale. How cruel for Jessie and Josh who enter the dilapidated house just by chance. Or maybe they were under a spell cast by Sita and her lover. The end is so haunting and scary!
Friendly Suggestions: The part where Sita and Dimitro transfer their curse to Jessie and Josh has to be explained with more clarity.
I give a 5 rating to all stories I review so as to not diminish the appeal of your story for other readers. My actual rating is 4.
The following is my humble feedback on your work:-
The Language: Easy to understand.
The Plot: A little girl ventures out to explore a creepy decrepit house which is situated near to her home.
What I enjoyed? You hooked me right at the beginning. I enjoy tales of haunted houses and this one just hit the right chord. You built up enough suspense and tension.
Friendly Suggestions: The ending did not go down well with me. I thought that you were constrained by a word limit. However, I would consider you to flesh out the details a bit after the contest ends.
I give a 5 rating to all stories I review so as to not diminish the appeal of your story for other readers. My actual rating is 4.
The following is my humble feedback on your work:-
The Language: Easy to understand
The Plot: An autobiography written by a little child.
What I enjoyed?This was a really sweet story. It says crib which means that the entire story has been written from the POV of an infant. How so very lovely! I enjoyed all the ruminations of the kid. For a moment, you had me worried that something bad had happened to her parents .I am so happy that it worked out so well for her.
Friendly Suggestions:None
I give a 5 rating to all stories I review so as to not diminish the appeal of your story for other readers. My actual rating is also 5.
The following is my humble feedback on your work:-
The Language: Easy to understand.
The Plot:This is an excerpt from a diary. The date and time are mentioned in the beginning. The time means that this story was crafted right after the cruise.
What I enjoyed?This is a nice story of fun and frolic being indulged in by a group of middle- aged ladies. I enjoyed the scenes of fun and gaiety that you recreated. The sights of New York were vividly described. There was no complication in the story, no hidden agendas being pursued by anybody. It was just plain fun.
The following is my humble feedback on your work:-
The Language: Though written in verse, the words are well-spun together and easily comprehensible.
The Plot: This poem is a legend of two lovers who could not unite in life but did so in death and the afterlife.
What I enjoyed? There is a wonderful plot in your poem. It was like reading a story in the fantasy genre. How the two lovers meet, how they are killed and how they unite in the afterlife made for a fascinating reading. Your poem had me hooked right from the first stanza.
Friendly Suggestions: None
I give a 5 rating to all stories I review so as to not diminish the appeal of your story for other readers. My actual rating is also 5.
The following is my humble feedback on your work:-
The Language: Easy to understand.
The Plot: A poem written by a lady who is spurned by her lover. She expresses her anguish but at the same time determines to move on.
What I enjoyed? Tales (Poems) on unrequited love always cause me pain. Nothing can be harsher. It is still better if your loved one simply ignores you. But instead if he tortures and humiliates you, it multiplies the tragedy manifold. The end where the woman resolved to move on and wait for the right man in her love fills me with hope and contentment.
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I give a 5 rating to all stories I review so as to not diminish the appeal of your story for other readers. My actual rating is also 5.
The following is my humble feedback on your work:-
The Language: Easy to understand. Lucid and smooth.
The Plot: An essay that lays out the pros and cons of imposing government controls on social media.
What I enjoyed? I liked the way you argued the case for not imposing restrictions on social media. The comparison with fast food was apt. My case against social media is that it is addictive and engaging with it leads to productivity losses at the work place. It is difficult for humans to retrain themselves because of its easy accessibility. For example, an alcoholic will have find it difficult to consume liquor in the workplace. But a social media addict would have no such limitations. I believe that in educational institutes and work places, there should be technology available to block social media.
Friendly Suggestions: None
I give a 5 rating to all stories I review so as to not diminish the appeal of your story for other readers. My actual rating is also 5.
The following is my humble feedback on your work:-
The Language: Easy to understand.
The Plot: A lady seems to attract strangers to her at a coffee shop or the supermarket.
What I enjoyed? There are a lot of similarities between my wife and you. Even she has this uncanny ability of striking up conversations with complete strangers. I find that a very useful and a precious skill. Though, it was right to not accept an invitation to the old gentleman's home, there is no harm in being friendly and approachable.
Friendly Suggestions: None
I give a 5 rating to all stories I review so as to not diminish the appeal of your story for other readers. My actual rating is 4.5.
The following is my humble feedback on your work:-
The Language: Easy to understand.
The Plot: A girl dreams about a rich brother who she never knew existed.
What I enjoyed? This is a unique story and it sounds true because the writer's name and the main lead's name match. First things first, good job done Kimberly. . If this is indeed a true story, thank you for sharing. If it is fictional, it still carries a powerful message which is "Believe in something you really care about and the Universe will find a way to make it happen."
I also feel sorry for Kimberly because she is an orphan. I can only imagine how hard that must be!
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I give a 5 rating to all stories I review so as to not diminish the appeal of your story for other readers. My actual rating is also 5.
The following is my humble feedback on your work:-
The Language: Easy to understand
The Plot: A short essay on Eve who is the first mother in the Bible.
What I enjoyed? This is a unique tale with a powerful message. We might not be as privileged as Eve was to be in direct communion with God but He is available to each one of us. He has a way of communicating with all his children. You only need to believe in Him and be ready to completely surrender yourself at his feet. Your story is also laudatory because it praises Eve for being the first which meant that she had no role model to fall back upon. Anyone who bears any grudge against her for falling to prey to temptation is only a hypocrite deserving severe chastisement.
Friendly Suggestions: None
I give a 5 rating to all stories I review so as to not diminish the appeal of your story for other readers. My actual rating is 4.
The following is my humble feedback on your work:-
The Language: Easy to understand.
The Plot: A lady responds to an ad for a guest room on rent. The address appears to be remote. The woman receives a mixed welcome from the two owners of the house.
What I enjoyed? This seems to be an excerpt from a larger piece. This introductory prologue hooked me right at the beginning. The two owners of the house are such a contrast! One seems to warm and welcoming, the other one is cold and surly. I would surely like to know who these two characters are.
Friendly Suggestions: Nothing
I give a 5 rating to all stories I review so as to not diminish the appeal of your story for other readers. My actual rating is also 5.
The following is my humble feedback on your work:-
The Language: Easy to understand.
The Plot: A page from a diary written by a 14 year old girl.
What I enjoyed? I liked the smooth flow of all the events that have occurred in the girl's life. The unexplained disappearance of her father's fourth wife added a dash of mystery. It was heartening to see Edith's relationship with her other siblings including the step ones. The entire read sounded authentic and true.
Friendly Suggestions: You should add more entries to this diary and convert it into a mystery story.
I give a 5 rating to all stories I review so as to not diminish the appeal of your story for other readers. My actual rating is 4.
The following is my humble feedback on your work:-
The Language: Simple and easy to understand.
The Plot: A man is writing a letter to his ex where he confesses the reasons for ditching her.
What I enjoyed? Your story evoked revulsion in me for Todd. How can he be so weak-minded that he can't be without his girlfriend even for a few days! Is he a baby who has to always be pampered and fussed over at all times? He is also a coward. When he has committed such a grave crime, he should be confessing in person to the lady he has wronged. Instead, he resorts to the pusillanimous method of writing a mail.
Friendly Suggestions: None
I give a 5 rating to all stories I review so as to not diminish the appeal of your story for other readers. My actual rating is 4.5.
The following is my humble feedback on your work:-
The Language: Lucid and pleasant to read.
The Plot: A story about a random act of kindness at a restaurant.
What I enjoyed? I enjoyed the simple story with a powerful message that random acts of kindness make the world a better place to live in. The short one-sided conversation "All is well" was great way to kindly hope in a sad soul.
Friendly Suggestions: None
I give a 5 rating to all stories I review so as to not diminish the appeal of your story for other readers. My actual rating is also 5.
The following is my humble feedback on your work:-
The Language: The narration shifts from first person to second person. It must be intended though but I did not get the purpose of doing so.
Example: One winter while I was in the Peace Corps, I went to Taiwan on a personal visit. He met a famous fortuneteller who made three predictions – He would marry an Asian woman; he would marry when he was 27 and he would become a diplomat. All three predictions turned out to be true.
In the above paragraph borrowed from your story, why does it shift from the first person to the second person?
The Plot: This is a sweet love story with lots of psychic drama.
What I enjoyed? I liked the steadfastness of the main lead towards his dream. It is said that if you believe something really strongly, the universe rewards you with it.
Friendly Suggestions: I would enjoy this story more if there is consistency in the narration (the conflict between first person and second person)
I give a 5 rating to all stories I review so as to not diminish the appeal of your story for other readers. My actual rating is 4.
The following is my humble feedback on your work:-
The Language: Easy to understand.
The Plot: Two men meet for dinner but the consequences are unimaginable and terrifying.
What I enjoyed? This is a good attempt at gore and horror. The way the story moves from a botched up dinner to a malevolent and perverted occurrence is admirable. You surely have let your imagination run riot. It really made me wonder whether such characters do exist in real life. I am sure they do.
Friendly Suggestions: None.
I give a 5 rating to all stories I review so as to not diminish the appeal of your story for other readers. My actual rating is 4.
The following is my humble feedback on your work:-
The Language: Easy to understand.
The Plot: This is the story of a person who could tell about the past by just being in the place where those occurrences had taken place.
What I enjoyed? I am always fascinated with psychic tales. The man has a unique gift which is admirable. Your story underscores the axiom that truth is stranger than fiction. It is actually chilling to think of being in such a person's shoes. Just imagining about a probable eerie history of a place would give me the creeps. Imagine how terrifying it must be visualize the entire ghastly scene play out before your eyes!
Friendly Suggestions: You mention that you could tell about murders that have happened centuries ago. This played upon my mind and I imagined that the boy who was murdered must have lived a long time ago. How come the police could test the water in the child's lungs?
I give a 5 rating to all stories I review so as to not diminish the appeal of your story for other readers. My actual rating is 4.
The following is my humble feedback on your work:-
The Language: Easy to understand.
The Plot: A racoon hunter ventures into an unknown part of the woods. He has heard some scary stories about that area but he still proceeds.
What I enjoyed? I liked the sense of paranormal and eerie atmosphere you create.
But I had a good laugh when you write that you forgot all your father's tips on bravery and instead made a dash to safety. I don't know if humor was intended but I found it hilarious.
Friendly Suggestions: Some more facts about what creates the scary atmosphere would help.
I give a 5 rating to all stories I review so as to not diminish the appeal of your story for other readers. My actual rating is 4.5.
The following is my humble feedback on your work:-
The Language: Easy to understand.
The Plot: A story set in 1971 where a pleasure excursion turns into a nightmare when a member of the group accidentally shoots himself.
What I enjoyed? Your descriptions are detailed. You bring out well the contrasting emotions of the group before and after the accident. How Woody's excessively fat body turns out to be a savior is humorous.
Friendly Suggestions: I found the last line a bit confusing. Were they planning to shoot the cans with dummy bullets? Had Woody actually placed real bullets? How could the group think that dummy bullets could do such harm to Woody?
I give a 5 rating to all stories I review so as to not diminish the appeal of your story for other readers. My actual rating is 4.5.
The following is my humble feedback on your work:-
The Language: Smooth and easy to understand.
The Plot: A 'self-help' guide for women writers who are walking the tightrope of balancing the needs of their family and the demands of their profession.
What I enjoyed? The fifth point in your list - Love what you do - was the cherry on the cake. That is applicable for anyone who does anything that is socially useful. In fact, your article would hold true for all working women, not just for women who write.
Friendly Suggestions: None
I give a 5 rating to all stories I review so as to not diminish the appeal of your story for other readers. My actual rating is also 5.
The following is my humble feedback on your work:-
The Language: Easy to understand.
The Plot: A story about how a son brings happiness to his recuperating mother.
What I enjoyed? I liked the way you traverse a period of 24 years with such few words. You create powerful emotions. The delightful thing is that the relationship between mother and son has remain unchanged over 24 years. This is unique because real life is not usually so kind. I am happy that it has worked out so well in the writer's life.
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I give a 5 rating to all stories I review so as to not diminish the appeal of your story for other readers. My actual rating is also 5.
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