For me he is a triune God. He is the beginning and the end, the alpha and omega. He is both the Father, the Son and the Holy Spirit. With that alone He already displays his power.
Honestly, I am thrilled and I will be waiting for its continuation. I like it. It is still the start but I already enjoyed it.
However there are typographical errors.
I was speachless...should have been speechless.
I again clicked the recieve button and read...recieve should have been receive.
Then you can use on of those search engines for people."...Did you mean you can use one of those search engines.
Your piece is nice. It really has a perspective. It leaves the reader something to ponder or think about.
However, may I honestly say there are typographical errors in it. "a young girl kneel down and pray for help while here parents do drugs" Kneel should be in the singular and it should have been 'her parents.'
Furthermore, your use of "God's" I think is not proper. May I suggest you complete your words for better understanding and to avoid confusion or misunderstanding by your readers.
Keep writing. No offense ok? You have the talent but we there are still rooms for improvement.
First of all I like your poem because it is written with a lot of advice and it leaves the reader something to think about, something to ponder. I don't know you personally but the poem is impressed with experience and teachings one can prove for himself to be factual or a mere case-to-case basis.
"What people say doesn’t mean a thing, that idea is best!" I agree with you in this one but for me, sometimes it is also good to listen to what others have to say but one must learn to receive only constructive criticisms because the people around us are the mirrors of ourselves. They see something we don't in ourselves and they tend to reflect what they see in us.
Nowadays, people don't look at heaven when problems overwhelm this earth. Sometimes, they even curse God because of their shortcomings and unfulfilled dreams. I find it amusing for someone to still think of heaven even if his or her naked eye looks at nothing but devatation, destruction or abomination.
Keep writing. Sometimes as I believe, we writers see something or view something that others don't. So it is our duty to write and let our thoughts and views be known to others so that they may also know what lies within that they couldn't see because they are busy.
Your positive and healthy view of the things around you will serve as an ecouragement to others and that included me.
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