First Impression/My Favorite:
Your writing about a mother talking to her son's grave is emotional. Your words are very powerful and bring out the person's state-of-mind
very clearly. It surely is traumatizing to lose someone. Your words brought tears in my eyes. Thanks for Sharing.
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I have no suggestions. Your descriptive words are very intense.
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Your dark poem about evil is nice. The title is apt and the lines flow well. My favorite lines are; "Challenging upheaval
Pursuing all in vain."
These lines have deep dark thoughts. I like your word choices. Thanks for Sharing.
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I have no suggestion. The form is written well. Your words are emotional!
Hi razia! After reading "YOU" , I offer you these comments:
First Impression/My Favorite:
Your poem about someone special is good. The title is apt and you convey so much in simple words.
A special person means the world to one when the whole world seems null. Thanks for Sharing.
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I have no suggestion. Your poem is inspirational.
These are just my views, even without the changes your poem is good.
Hi Sarah N.! After reading "On Grief" , I offer you these comments:
First Impression/My Favorite:
Your short poem about grief is emotional. The title is apt and the lines flow well. My favorite part is your comparison
with the melon scoop. Such deep thoughts! Thanks for Sharing.
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I have no suggestion. Your words are philosophical.
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Your inspiring message about love is lovely! Spreading love will double one's inner-peace. My favorite line is; "Love is what is saving the world."
This is so true. Thanks for Sharing.
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I have no suggestion. Your words are strong and emotional!
First Impression/My Favorite:
Your poem about woman is beautiful. The title is apt and the lines flow well. My favorite lines are; "i am human
i fail
i am a woman"
This is so true, I love the point here! Thanks for Sharing.
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I have no suggestion. I think your poem describes a woman completely. A lovely read!
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Your thoughts on "Regrets" and "Risks" are very true. I like your comparison of regrets with sand.
Yes, sometimes regrets do pull you down to your knees. Risks help one achieve impossible dreams.
Thanks for Sharing.
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I have no suggestion. Your words are inspirational!
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Your Valentine's poem is very touching. The lines flow very well. My favorite line is; "Blue scarlet tears and empty fears."
This line shows deep emotion. Thanks for Sharing.
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I have no suggestion. Your words are powerful.
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Your article about happiness is nice. Happiness is in enjoying/ living every moment and creating memories for a lifetime. Your thoughts are philosophical.
Thanks for Sharing.
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I have no suggestion. Your words are so true.
These are just my views, even without the changes your work is good.
First Impression/My Favorite:
Your poem is very nice. Some days are such a mess and we wish we hadn't woken up at all. My favorite lines are; "I return to find she's painted
White paws all over the floor."
These lines simply bring out the intense emotion with simple words! Thanks for Sharing.
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I have no suggestion. Your poem is good.
Hi Fyn! After reading "Dinosaurus" , I offer you these comments:
First Impression/My Favorite:
The poem about ship's hulk is very nice. The title is apt and the lines flow well. My favorite lines are; "Even scorpions die in
poisoned shade."
These lines are beautiful and powerful. Your words paint a picture in mind. Thanks for Sharing.
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I have no suggestion. Your poem is lovely!
First Impression/My Favorite:
Your poem about a mother is nice. The title is apt and the poem flows well.A mother is indeed all-rounder;
selfless service she renders. Thanks for Sharing.
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I have no suggestion. Your poem is inspirational!
First Impression/My Favorite:
Your poem about "Temptation" is nice. The title is apt and the poem flows well. My favorite line is; "A promise of passion,"
This line has deep meaning. Thanks for Sharing.
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I have no suggestion. Your poem is inspirational!
Hi Jolineann13! After reading "Time" , I offer you these comments:
First Impression/My Favorite:
Your writing about "Time" is good. Time is indeed un-barred. We can not capture it, but can control effective usage of time.
Your thoughts are philosophical and true! Thanks for Sharing.
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I have no suggestion. I wanted to read more. Maybe, you could expand it.😉
These are just my views, even without the changes your poem is good.
First Impression/My Favorite:
Your Children's poem about Cats is very cute. Your poem shares the secret about what cats do at night.
My favorite lines are; "They are enjoying scones and jam,
as well as tiny sandwiches of cucumbers and ham!"
These lines flow well. Children would definitely love this poem. Thanks for Sharing.
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I have one suggestion. I think there are a couple of lines where the rhyme is not quite right;
1. Lines 1 &2, Stanza 3
2. Lines 1 &2, Stanza 7
Otherwise, the poem is good!
These are just my views, even without the changes your poem is good.
First Impression/My Favorite:
Your poem about Life coming between writing is good. The title is apt and the poem flows well.
My favorite lines are; "Earn, buy, consume
Waste time to waste money"
These lines are philosophical!Thanks for Sharing.
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I have no suggestion. Your poem is inspirational!
These are just my views, even without the changes your poem is good.
First Impression/My Favorite:
Your poem about "Fake People" is good. The title is apt and the lines flow well. My favorite line is; "Once the bell rings, everyone is too their feet"
This line shares a sense of spirituality. But, did you mean "to"?
Thanks for Sharing.
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I have no suggestion, your poem is inspirational!
These are just my views, even without the changes your poem is good.
First Impression/My Favorite:
Your poem about a hair strand finding new meaning is great! The title is apt and the lines flow well. My favorite line is; "A loose jewel from the crown"
I like the beautiful imagery in this line! Thanks for Sharing.
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I have no suggestion. Your poem is philosophical and inspirational!
First Impression/My Favorite:
Your poem about a writer's frustration is emotional. It is truly very difficult to exactly put your feelings into words. And it
is uncertain that the same intensity of emotions would reach the reader! My favorite words are; "Think.
Imagine.
Dream.
How do I define..."
These words very aptly show the state-of-mind. Thanks for Sharing.
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I have no suggestion. Your poem is good.
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Your picture book verse is nice. Teaching ten numbers using animals is fun! The title is apt. My favorite line is; "Eight little llamas, looking for their mamas"
I like the rhyme, it really flows well. Thanks for Sharing.
Punctuation/Spelling/Grammar/Suggestions:
I have one suggestion;
You have mostly used animals, except for "seeds". I think, you could change it to some animal.
These are just my views, even without the change your work is good.
Hi Kali! After reading "CONFUSED" , I offer you these comments:
First Impression/My Favorite:
Your Acrostic poem on "Confused" is good. I see that you have put the mixed feelings very aptly in words.
Thanks for Sharing.
Punctuation/Spelling/Grammar/Suggestions:
I have a couple of suggestions;
1. You could make the first letters of each line bold making "CONFUSED" prominent, or you could mention in the
description that the poem is in Acrostic form.
2. I think, "to" from the first line should be "too";
"Caring to much when others don't"
These are just my views, even without the changes your poem is good.
First Impression/My Favorite:
Your poem about your valentine is nice. My favorite lines are; "Mold me as you wish
I will follow your demands"
These lines are strong and they show your love. Your poem is emotional. Thanks for Sharing.
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I have only one suggestion;
You could remove the word "Worth" from the line, "Worth pursuing my once withered dreams" for a better flow and to avoid repetition of
the word.
These are just my views, even without the changes your poem is good.
Hi ! After reading "Darkened Sky" , I offer you these comments:
First Impression/My Favorite:
Your poem about Nature is nice. The title is apt and the words flow well. My favorite lines are; "The pink sunset
Kisses the sky."
Beautiful imagery! Nature brings out lots of questions, it also encapsules all the answers in it! It is up to us to
find answers, a journey of self realization! Thanks for Sharing.
Punctuation/Spelling/Grammar/Suggestions:
I have no suggestion. Your poem is inspirational.
Hi Alex! After reading "Always Moving" , I offer you these comments:
First Impression/My Favorite:
Your poem about Nature is beautiful. I like the fluid words and the title which is apt. My favorite lines are; "Stars in the sky.
An everlasting light show."
These lines are so true and vivid! Thanks for Sharing.
Punctuation/Spelling/Grammar/Suggestions:
I have no suggestion. Your poem is good!
Hi Blue! After reading "Novel" , I offer you these comments:
First Impression/My Favorite:
The Acrostic poem on "Novel" is good. I like the short and strong words. My favorite line is the last line; "Love in written spirit..."
This line is so true. Thanks for Sharing.
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I have no suggestion. Your poem is emotional and beautiful!
Thankyou, Puja.
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