Hi apoorva
I cannot comment on grammar as this is my weak area, but the poem flowed well I like the rhyming stanzas. to my this shows the first rage of emotions waiting for the next stage.
Hi turretguy
Wow what a story, It kept me riveted to the end, is this the opening chapter of a novel if so I cannot wait to read the rest. The story flowed well and I felt apart of it. It was an interesting point of view to write from the deceased persons perceptive of death especially when they are taken suddenly.
Hi 1jerseyboy
I enjoyed reading this very much, yes it is short but very much to the point. It flows well. I can picture it in my mind, at one point it writes like you are the nest. Or is it your own feelings of loss and abandonment? That have spurred you to write this.
Hi Taylor I have enjoyed reading your short story, I had a sense of being the butterfly. I could mentally picture a butterfly hoping from flower to flower looking unsuccessfully for a a mate before his short time on earth comes to an end. thank you for this
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