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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This is 99% perfect. Minus the use of the word ass. The word goes against the sweet, frienldy style of the writing. The way it is written macks everything sound peaceful and nice. Keep with that theme.
You seem to be able to get inside the mans mind and express what he is feeling.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
I still can feel him on me,
and in me, and trying to pull off my jeans.
I am the king of writing out of order so...but if I read it write...the jeans come off before the in me part.
Very easy to feel in your shoes.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I like the line The Beautiful Letdown.
I am not exactly sure what its about though.
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
I life the repeatative style of this one. Your husband must be very understanding.
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Are your poems about real life events?
Yo write very clearly. It is easy to feel you laying in your bed.
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