Very gripping and the way you write about the universe and the enviroment is so natural. I couldn't stop reading after I started. I enjoyed the characters and the setting, just nice story telling overall and I would surely read more of it if it was to go on.
Really immersive, specially on the language. I really enjoyed the story and I think that it stands even without prior knowledge to the song. Great writing, and the way you tell the story is really hooking and interesting. I will be reading more from you for sure.
I didn't quite like the format, the text seems to jump from place to place with no connecting passages. Some spelling errors, cliche (not always a bad thing, keep that in mind). Other than that, keep on writing.
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