I loved it and thought you did real well. I grew up in Burbank,CA and the beaches were a big part of my growing up. Thats the only thing I trully miss. and your poem described just what a day at the beach is like. Good rhyming too...
Very interesting, I truly feel like I learned a lot about london. Good and.bad. I love food and that seemed like a.big part of your esscavades. Trying the different cuisines must have been great. As far as sight seeing,you got to see lots of things that are famous in paris. With alll the inconviences you experienced truly made me feel like I was there with you. Loved your travaloge. I. Will plan my next vacation somewhere else as I feel I've already been to london and paris. Enjoyed reading your write.
You. Captured what it would feel like. The frustration of the loved one that deals with the sick person. It is such a sad disease.
I like the line our positions are reversed. That's the alzheimers curse.
It brings home the reality of the disease. Its funny we go out the same way we came in. We are born with no teeth. We have to learn to go to the bathroom many mistakes. When were r5old we need help with the same things we had to.
Learn as a baby. You also likened her to a child who was terrified and angry just as. A person would really be. I enjoyed your write...
I really liked your poem, such poetic words you used. Poetic words to describe awful things, I liked that. Like the lines, ' Skies impugned with such glorious light. Seething with that insidious blight. ' The comparison between the two was great. The glorious light verses deceitful betrayal. Very good, I look forward to reading more of your writes.....
It takes such thought for these poems. Good job. The picture perfectly relates to the poem. I have no tips for improving, I'm learning from you. Very nice..
Boy, I'm just learning alot of these various poem forms. I loved yours, it really helped me to understand the rhyme scheme. Also, the title reflecting the poem, I would'nt have known that. Also, your note very appreciated, I also leave notes. Thank-you, I look forward to reading more of your writes.....
A deeply emotional poem and subject. You just inspired my next poem. I had wrote one about the mass shooting at the Batman premier in Colorado. It's titled ' Murder by Surprise.' This mass murder is the MOST emotional horror yet. You wrote your poem from the eyes of a mother that lost a child. Well done! Your last line: My flesh and blood, my child, my love. was a great line, summed up your loss. Look forward to reading more of your writings......
Very good, the words you choose really described each thought. I actually started to feel sad for her. Look forward to reading more of your writings....
I was certainly impressed. We all have insecurites about different things. But we don't allow them to hold us back.. I loved the encouragement it gave. Pretty soon you'll be your own biggest fan. I love that, i'll pat myself on the back... You can also be your worst enemy, I certainly was..Have confidence and not self doubt, says alot.
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