Your readers might enjoy why you like the scent, what it reminds you of, smells like?
I feel like this poem is empty praise of a product I am not honestly sure you even like. So, there is that. I am not sure how to develop the change that would make this great. The poem is listed as free verse but it seems like you were going for a very specific format style which causes some of the repetition that leaves me questioning the extravegance and delight of Hawaiian Breeze.
This is a very visually striking poem, I like how first the lamb was a tiger but then as dreams do it shifted and the lamb was a frog who turned out to be a prince-- The frog prince. It was a unique take and I enjoyed reading through it. I cannot wait to read more of your works.
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