The imagery is wonderful & unique throughout. It flows well, until I reached the 3rd line of the 4th section through to the 6th section. Once there, it flowed smoothly again for me. Perhaps some rearrangement or changing out words would work well. I just lost the picture & understanding there. It seemed like maybe something was missing, like a gap in time or pages missing from a book.
I'd love to read more of your work. :0)
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