It is a pleasure to stand with you after the close of these 21 Days of Poetry.
This poem appealed to me because the imagery and sensations were captured extremely well. You actually delved into the wall and what it represented without apology or trying to make it beautiful. I liked the honesty of that approach. The title Imprisonment was strong and the poem did not disappoint or deny its strength. A very nice look at something disturbing.
This is a lovely expression of how someone feels about the person they love.
I like the line: I feel as though I'm on a majestic plateau. How wonderful it is to feel that someone's love has elevated our emotions to a loftier place and realm.
Thank you for writing this and what the true meaning of Christmas is.
The world becomes frantic toward the end of the year and it isn't until the New Year arrives that some think, wasn't there supposed to be something more to all this.
Christ's birth changed the world, whether you believe in Him or not, that fact remains.
Clever working of words making the case for writing and the need to do it.
I liked the little insider's bit with the font names, this makes one believe the writer has actually searched for something other than the normal 'New Times Roman'.
The line at the end threw me off by seeming so abrupt, however this was where the rhyme matched the other lines so it just happened that way.
Good first chapter showing the confusion of being displaced into a foreign environment and aiming for survival. Good banter from the contemporary heroine set against a more formal Ketsueki.
The chapter held enough intrigue to prompt reading into the next.
Extremely interesting concept. I enjoy reading pieces that provide a different slant, such as the reality view of a pencil. Favorite line: She was very tall with a disgustingly dirty eraser with little bits of the top coming off that looked like it hadn't been used in weeks.
The piece also addresses, with a fresh approach, the downfall of falling to peer pressure.
The only problem with the piece is its readability. Consider spacing between the paragraphs and the impact will be greater, helping the reader grasp the meaning
without struggling.
Wonderful! All those things stuffing themselves into a few moments of personal time.
I love the line: "I've explained this to her before but have come to realize that Pam needs a date with a neurologist to test her memory loss, but both of us forget to call for the appointment."
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