Honestly, this piece was brilliant. I enjoyed it thoroughly. It was the sole cause of a withdrawal of the dictionary, and the acquisition of a number of adjectival 'fruit from the vine'. The symbolic and metaphoric play was splendid, it was well concluded, and ah, I am inexpressibly gratified. Brilliance. To incorporate distinct characterisation, amiable personification and vivid delineation, into one coherent, educational and assonant piece of poetry, requires innovation and elevated talent. I congratulate you.
Well evinced, Jullian, yet it is traditionally very hard-fought to extricate universal axioms and aphorims such as these from the compendium of cliches. The key is to differentiate the piece from being an original assemblage of bromidic statements, and attempt to express the ideal without some of the more common labels and attachments. This is not to say your piece is unoriginal or poorly done. You elevate your message to the reader emphatically and laconically. Being 'Words For Thought', they have certainly achieved their purpose.
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