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Hi, this is Perry. I love to review especially newbies. I try my best in reviewing with honesty. Poems is what I review the most. I deeply examine the lines and pin point the necessary corrections if needed. Short stories of around 1000 words are also warmly welcomed. If you are looking for an honest and meaningful review, you can reach me. Good luck!
I'm good at...
Poetry and mystery writing.
Favorite Genres
Comedy, Family and Romance/Love.
I will not review...
Novels/novellas
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Review of Random activities  Open in new Window.
Review by Dr Perry Ride Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
I enjoyed them. Thank you for brightening my mood.
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Review by Dr Perry Ride Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.5)
It would have been better if you could name each form. Like those who aren't familiar with the forms won't be able to answer. So, my suggestion would be to place the picture of each form along with its name, like you did it in sonic poll. If you like the GIF, you can put it there but pictures would do a great help.

All in all, I had fun.
Perry.
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Review of Death  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (3.5)

Hello PoetInTheInside Author Icon,

I'm Dr Perry Ride Author Icon and came across this beautiful piece of writing through the "Noticing Newbies" Newsletter.
I found this article intriguing and full of turns and twists.

Although the writing flow is maintained throughout the poem, yet the reader can get distracted at some points.
for instance, "...because not only we are scared by ii but also..." and here "...I don't want to hurt them, but if I did, it wouldn't really be a problem...", where a comma is needed.
You just need to revise any article before posting because sometimes while we are writing, we can make mistakes but when you post it you require editing.

Now, back to the main content, the content is very good, especially the opening paragraph. It is creating questions, answering them, telling the readers what they already know, convincing your voice and then defying them. It's all smoothly done.
However, at some points, I felt like it was about to turn to a completely different topic.
The article is short, explains the thoughts of many and puts forward its own opinion. Written in simple language, it touches a few aspects about death but in depth. The author depicts 'death' as a part of life that is inevitable and advocates that life though ephemeral is worth living to its fullest. That's the main reason I would appreciate this article. "death" is nothing to scared of. It's just a part of life and we need to accept it. Generally, when people face death for the first time or of any close relative, they just accept it. It feels like dream and when will they wake up. It feels like a totally new world and they are not wrong. We can cry but we shouldn't for a long time. "The show must go on." The poem is capable of convincing this idea and accepting death is one of the most difficult parts. It is inevitable, we can't turn our back to it. The author supports this by providing her example.
Nevertheless, it is not known how she is able to know her future.
Since the writing style is straight without much straddling the fence, some of its points can be controversial.

There are a lot of things I would like to appreciate here.
1. The straight opening line. Direct sentence without beating about the bush. Many articles just go round and round or never directly point out what they want to say. I like the straightforwardness of this article.
2. You talked about 'suicide'. "... and I totally get it."
"... strong, courageous, fearless as weak, terrified and selfish."
You covered both the points simultaneously.
3. The last stanza. I know it's almost impossible to be cheerful over a dead body but at least we can hope that everyone would be happy.
4. Small things like- organ donation, to make our own decisions, others also need us even if we aren't realising it, etc.


There are also a lot of questionable or rather controversial points here.
1. There are many places where I felt like the main content got diverted. The article was not fully focused on 'Death'. It included many other sub-topics and many important points were left out.
2. You said you aren't afraid of death because you neither have a husband nor any kid. But how can you cast aside your remaining family? The author is merely 22 years old! Doesn't she have anyone in her family? Parents, relatives, friends, or anyone?
3. It's good that it forbids the readers to be afraid of death but on the other side, the article also takes a pessimistic turn when the author says that she doesn't draw any future or wishes, she just lives. Living the moment and weaving dreams are two different things. Why does she want to give in and not fight back for survival? How can she be sure that she going to die at an early age and that too in a car accident? People with cancer fight to survive, some even make it happen while the author just gives in that too just because she feels so?
4. Majority of people do not live their lives to the fullest. There are very less people who don't flaunt.

Just my opinion, I think we aren't scared of death but the physical pain of dying.
Personally, I want to know why the author feels like she is going to die at the age of 27? Is she a potent clairvoyant?
The title "Death" is wisely chosen, no capping, clearly foretelling what the content is about.

Overall, it was a nice experience reading your article and worth time- investing.

Good luck in the fututre,

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Review of Writing in Snow  Open in new Window.
Review by Dr Perry Ride Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Woah! Nice accomplishments!
Wish you a very happy new year 🎉!
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Review of The Bird  Open in new Window.
Review by Dr Perry Ride Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.5)
Hello Ronski,
Thank you for participating in "Invalid ItemOpen in new Window. . I am reviewing your poem as one of the Contest's judge.
The poem is well written with nice flow. Poetic devices used glorify it.
Good luck with the contest.
Dr Perry Ride
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Review of Why  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)



Thank you for participating in "Invalid ItemOpen in new Window.. I am reviewing your poem as one of the Contest's judge.

*Badge3* *Badge* This review is part of "Earn Your Badge! - ClosedOpen in new Window.; a forum to post reviews and earn Merit Badges! *Badge* *Badge3*

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Title:

The title "WhyOpen in new Window. given suits the poem. The whole poem is like a question which one has thought of once in his/her lifetime. It does not start with the easy ones like 'what', 'when' or 'where' but one of the most exhausting and difficult "WHY".

Theme:
This poetry consists of 6 two-lined stanzas each containing an unanswerable question. What the beauty of this poetry is, is that every question seems to have a very lengthy and descriptive answer but the poet answers it in the next line with simplicity. Being non- verbose, it says a lot. It touches deep aspects of life and confidently answers them.

What I liked
This may not be a part of poetry as such but I would like to appreciate the "edit points" after every para. It allows one to share their own ideas and make the poem more accurate and relatable.





Good luck. *Smile*
Dr Perry Ride
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Review of Writing.Com 101  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)

Thank you. This was really helpful to me and I guess for many as well.

1. The process is written in points and explained in a simple way. This helps to try out and make new templates without any difficulty.
2. It is appreciable that how every necessary point is mentioned without being verbose.
3. It is open to receive any review, this enables and encourages one to try out here as soon as possible.
It is short and informing, thereby receiving a perfect rating from me.

Dr Perry Ride
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Review of Other World  Open in new Window.
Review by Dr Perry Ride Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.5)
Seems fun. I would also like to visit the "Other World".*Crazy*
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Review by Dr Perry Ride Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Loren!

You referred us as 'Shooting Stars'! Thanks*BigSmile*. So, we are the 'Rising Shooting Stars'!
Well written and the crossword was an easy (maybe because I have solved a lot till now) but a gripping one.
Congratulations on completing your task!

See you
Perry
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Review by Dr Perry Ride Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello Anna!

The crossword was engaging and thanks for the answer key because at certain places it was difficult to answer. This was great and I came to know more about our friends through it.

See you
Perry
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Review by Dr Perry Ride Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Marvilla!
The crossword is interesting and I came to know about many new things. I didn't knew much about Sirius earlier but now I think I have become wiser. *Wink*

See you.
Perry
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Amazing! I listened to your video and that was really amazing. The expressions, your actions and the changing pitch... it was all very good. *Clap*

Perry.
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Review by Dr Perry Ride Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is complete nostalgic.
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Review of A Thought  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hello Beautiful Disaster!!



First of all, Happy Anniversary!! *Party*
I went through your portfolio (because it's your Anniversary month) and came across this piece of writing. 😊


Title:

The title "A Thought" given suits the poem. The title is the central idea which revolves around the whole poetry.

Theme:
An attempt to capture a thought before it slips away.
Boldly depicted the idea of epiphany. The theme is based upon merely 'a thought' and paints those thoughts in different ways.

Figure of Speech:
Imagery is used a lot in the poetry, like here:
" The beauty of
Sudden lightning
"

Personification is also used, for instance here:
"As the butterfly
Flown away
"

What I liked
The detailed picturization of just a thought, is really appreciable. The figures of speech used decorates the poetry. The bold effect, the colour used, centre, the whole presentation is very good. The flow is well maintained.
Especially, the way a thought is shown is what I liked the most.
The idea of it that a thought generally remains for a second like a butterfly , like a lightning is cordial.

My Suggestion
Here I could not found any errors.
It is just a review. Your uniqueness, thinking style and prospective matters more!! (I have my own and so you have yours.😀)






See you.
Perry.😁😁

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Review of Addicted  Open in new Window.
Review by Dr Perry Ride Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Hello there!

The title Addicted is interesting.
The addiction here is about writing, which is quite relevant - not too serious thankfully.
The expression of a writer's feeling is well displayed.

The whole poem is written placing the "pen" as the narrator, which is again an interesting thing.

See you.
Perry.
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Review of Poetry  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
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Hello bluehats#5 !

It is a well written poem.
The theme focuses on a wider aspect of darkness. It has shows how fear is embedded within us.

Figure of Speech used:
Simile is used here:
"Your life's as fragile as a spark."

See you.
Perry.
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Review of Blank Page  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello LeJen'D !!



Again, I went through your portfolio and came across this piece of writing. 😊



Title:

The title "Blank Page" given suits the prompt and the poem perfectly. "BlankPage" is the central idea which revolves around the whole poetry.
The title itself is an eye catcher.

Theme:
Not only the title is interesting but also the poetry is riveting.
'Bane of the blank page'- an unusual theme,expressed exquisitely.


Rhyme Scheme and Form
This poem is written in free verse consisting of 8 lines.

Figure of Speech:
Metaphor is used in the lines:
"and words again flow like a river"
Personification here:
"blank page stares haughtily back"

What I liked
The unbreakable flow maintained throughout the poem. Right from starting "wracking mind for words" the readers get attached. The points mentioned are very relatable. Especially the "epiphany" part.
The whole poem itself is very nicely written but if I have to choose any favorite line, it would be:
"blank page stares haughtily back"

My Suggestion
Here I could not found any errors.

It is just a review. Your uniqueness, thinking style and prospective matters more!! (I have my own and so you have yours.😀)







See you.
Perry.😁😁

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Review of Balance  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello LeJen'D!!



I went through your portfolio and came across this piece of writing. 😊


Title:

The title "Balance" given suits the poem. "Balance" is the central idea which revolves around the whole poetry and the prompt.
It talks about the balance maintained in the nature, especially relating to the prompt : image of balancing rocks in Zimbabwe.

Theme:
Nature and it's beauty. The way nature balances the laws of physics is shown in a very unique manner.


Rhyme Scheme and Form
This poem is written with rhyme scheme abcb defe consisting of 8 lines.

Figure of Speech:
Imagery is used in the lines:
"Precariously perched
stacks made of stone
"

What I liked
The poem matches with the prompt and praises nature for it's diversity. The poem expresses more in a much lesser words. The choice of words is the best part of this poetry.
My favorite line:
"gravity defying
equilibrium shown
"

My Suggestion
Here I could not found any errors.




See you.
Perry.😁😁

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Review of Dishonesty  Open in new Window.
Review by Dr Perry Ride Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Nicely written poem.

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Review of Gentle Annie  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
It would have been better if you had explained a bit about Raglan Road and this poem connections as you have used the word Annie and not Hilda
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Rated: E | (4.0)
The flow is well maintained without confusing the plot. The description provided of each character is tidy and realistic.
However the ending is not so satisfying but I guess you wrote it for the Writer's Cramp. So, since it has to be under 1000 words, it is quite interesting.

Overall, very good *Clap*. Keep it up!*Delight*

Perry
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Review of A Vaporfly  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello ChristineB !
A new approach towards parties and running shoes*Laugh* .
The last stanza is just hilarious:

I’ll save for a Nike Vaporfly
And when I can afford it,
That’s what I’ll buy
.

Perry
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hello Dave!

I am reviewing your poem as a judge of Oriental Poetry Contest.

The flow is well maintained. From starting till the end.


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Review of L'aura del Campo  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hello Kare!

I am reviewing your poem as a judge of Oriental Poetry Contest.

Imagery and personification is very well used here.

Well described.

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Review by Dr Perry Ride Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello M C Gupta!
The poem is very inspiring. I liked the flow- from questioning to giving their answers.

It reminded me of
"Trust no future however pleasant
Let the past bury it's dead
"
-Psalm of life

Nice poem👏.

Perry.
Keep writing.
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