Thanks for sharing your write.I found it very interesting, and true to life--Hanolay being so excited , running out while his mother was preparing his breakfast, and climbing the wall.Nice planning as you kept me wondering what he was so excited about.
And no typing errors.Well done!! I hope you are going to write more chapters, as i will enjoy reading them.
This is a very emotional story! I felt like I was this little girl, being hurt the second time in my young life, by losing my mother.Good writing.Keep up the good work.
My favorite part is "The library became her only place in the whole world where she felt nothing could effect her."
Hello John,
I read your lovely poem "Star Crossed Lovers."
Good write.It really stirred emotions in me.I love
it just like it is. Don't change anything.The spelling is perfect.Choice of words and ryhme is very good.Keep on writing.
WRITE On!
Patricia
This is a piece of art!Beautiful idea.The story is very clear and easy to follow. Put together very well.No errors in spelling.Turning this trashed into a nice clean park and playgroundis just awesome.And to think a little child got this on the right track for all the kids to help.
A very unusual and lovely story.I can imagine myself in her place remembering the past and imaging herself as she used to be.All the memorys in that jewelry box ,a story of her life--a treasure!I hope you continue to write.
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