I think your story needs a bit more. You have a vivid imagination and I like some of your descriptions but i can't help but feel something is missing. Computer geek/ weapon collector wakes up to a snowy day and finds Orcs taking over his city and he instantaneously becomes a character from Lord of the Rings. Isn't he afraid? Where do the Orcs come from? No explanation? It's a little bit like cheap action and I'm sure that's not what you're aiming at. I give you three stars for creativity.
-i think everywhere is one word
-i don' t think you have a single comma. I feel you shoud have one after "slamming"
Wind blew fiercely, slamming hard against loose
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