This story was quick yet powerful. You did a great job of catching the reader up in the emotions of the moment. I also enjoyed the juxtaposition of a large, catastrophic scene with a quaint personal one. The message was subtle yet moving and immediate.
I would have liked if it had been just a little longer, though. :)
This story was fun to read, which is a quality that is difficult to capture. Everything that I expected to happen did not, and the plot twists were perfectly spaced and unpredictable. I have an affinity for a philosophical message, and the one in this story is very gratifying.
You might have read it over once more for spelling and word placement though :P
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