This poem is okay. I think it's cutesy and fun rather than a more in-depth, deep thinking poem. I like the humor you use with it at the end when you say "my favorite pencil in my hand". Overall this poem is good, my only advice would be to make it have more rhythm to it, since it is a more funny poem, I thinking rhyming more in it would work better for this particular poem.
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