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Review of I Like Spiders  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (5.0)
haha! I'm not a fan of poety about bugs, but I must say that I quite enjoyed this one.
My favorite line has to be:

" Which suck their tasty suppers,
Like milk shakes slurped through straws."


I was hoping that review I got came from an intelligent person.
It most definitely did!

Good work man!
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Review of 2011 poems  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (5.0)
Nice! I'm gone for a few days and you flood your page with new poetry! I love it!
Okay, Favorite line from each of the last four posted.

1. "Those That Send Off A Shower Of Sparks

"When I see your name in my mailbox
I take the stairs two at a time,"

2. "slumber parties"

"we will laugh about this in the morning
our matrimonial slumber parties."

3. "Stellar Plate Poems"

"a drift that settles upon you in
the middle of the night; forcing
you to race to write it down"

4. "Cold Cold Cold Cold Cold Cold Cold"

"Each year the winter really digs its nails
into this city."

There were more lines that i liked of course, but those were my favorite. :)
I can't wait to see more!
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Review of Thump Thump Beep  Open in new Window.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This was amazing!
I saw it listed as somebodies favorite and thought i would check it out.
I'm very glad I took the time to read it!

Good job!
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Review of On the Chance  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is an awesome piece of work!
The image at the top really accents the text.

Good job!
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Review of Love Hurts  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (4.5)
I like this one.
I'm sure many people have been in a similer situation.
I'm one of those people.

Good job!
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Rated: E | (5.0)
haha!
That's awesome!
This is a very imaginative piece of work!

Good job!
Loved it!
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Review of Now That’s All  Open in new Window.
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
This was an interesting piece.

I would say that the beginning and the end of a poem are most important.
The beginning has to catch the readers attention and make them want to keep reading.
The end has to leave them wanting more.

The beginning was okay, nothing special.
The end...Talking about hearts is always cliche.

Overall I like the idea of the poem.
Just remember to make the beginning and end catchey and unique and you should do alright.

Good job and keep writing!
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Review of The Missed Tryst  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
This poem has a good image, but you have to paint the image for the reader.
I need to be able to walk right beside you as you missed your time.

Why did you miss your appointed time? who missed the appointed time, you or him?

I've read so many poems that talk about breaking hearts and such.
I'm sure you could find another way to get your point accross with out saying you have a broken heart.
"My heart is broken and torn"

That being said, I liked the idea of the poem.
Good job and keep writing!
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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
This was interesting. I was intrigued by the word soldiers.
I'm a soldier currently in Afghanistan.
If it wasn't for that word this would have been of no interest to me.

I must say that when you said, "..they die by the tens,.."
I already knew you were going to use the term "tens of thousands"
That was a little predictable, but other than that it kept my attention.
Good job and keep writing!
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Rated: E | (4.5)
This is awesome!
It's always good to see somebody puting thier religion into thier writing.
Good job and keep writing!
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Review of Guns and Red Wine  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (4.5)
Good job, I really enjoied this piece!
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Review of Memories of Fall  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (4.5)
I've always loved pieces written about fall!
Good job and keep writing!
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Rated: E | (4.5)
This is an interesting piece.
I like it alot.
Good job and keep writing!
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Review of Flame of Hope  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is an interesting piece.
I like your writing style.
Good job and keep writing!
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Review of She Had to Endure  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (4.0)
This is an interesting piece.
I like your style of writing.
Good job and keep writing!
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Review of 2009 poems  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (5.0)
5. on the first day of spring. Love it!!
"...the way it pulls from her face when fanned by the turning of a page."
my favorite line!
It's just an awesome image.
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