Throughly enjoyable.The descriptfulness was reminiscent of American Psycho.
The characters were well thought out and well described for a short story.
The idea of the character seeing different couples in different stages of their relationships was interesting and a good read.
I adore the ending, putting an end the a pessimistic view of valentines day.
A start to be sure. Some spelling and grammatical mistakes make parts a little hard to understand. Some more detail would be nice with less run on dialogue. If you really have created a different universe then you should continue to write it. Please alert me if you decide to upload more I would like to read it.
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