The richness of emotions expressed is signatory of this poem. The unique placement of words is thought inducing and is nicely ordered. The incitement of excitement provided a nice invitement. Nevertheless the ability to clearly express the ideas didn’t live up to the other aspects of this poem. The buildup at the beginning that keeps the reader wanting to find the surprise that clouded the day is greatly diminished when the 10th line is reached. When she said “Thought to harm at first, salvation’s seeds were planted by that favor in disguise”, I think the words didn’t serve her well here in expressing the concept. This sentence has too many ideas that result in confusion. The next statement “Those wise have taught on being lost and say one way to find the way is seek the start.”, sounds illogical by implying that seeking the start is not a solution to finding the way. You cannot find anything if you don’t know where to start. The rest should also be altered after reexamining the concepts she is trying to deliver. Thank you for sharing your beautiful contributions.
Thanks for inspiring goodness and promoting generosity. This group should have nice effects on the writing community if it operated in fair manners. After reading the description of this group I am still not sure who exactly qualifies for these upgrades.
"We do not give Basic or Premium upgrades as it enables the group to give out many more individual two month Upgraded Memberships. This allows us to help more Writing.Com members."
I really didn't know what to make of that statement, can you please explain that to me.
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