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Review by Olivia4285 Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
What I like best is the title- 'four-legged protecter'. I never really thought of it that way, but dogs are like that. It also almost tells you about the poem, how it talks about the dog scaring the burglar. When it said 'the dog did not recall' is this because he doesn't recall meeting the person, so feels defensive?

In all, a great cinquain.

-Olivia
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Review of Sword poem  Open in new Window.
Review by Olivia4285 Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
I love this! It's so creative. It reminds me of a diamante poem. Even the writing is good. It's simple but tells you a lot in the short space it has. It's like it's telling an entire story in just a few words... I have never found anyone with this ability. It also displays determination, saying that if no one will teach her, she will teach herself.

-Olivia4285
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Review of Trick or Tweet  Open in new Window.
Review by Olivia4285 Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I *Heart* this. Awesome descriptive language, great theme, and lots of emotions. I like how it mentions his net-link number at the beginning, and later on you find out what it means. This changes from happy, then scary, and finally just plain sad. You have an amazing talent for writing and should definitely try to get it published. 2nd best only to the hunger games!


-Olivia4285
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Review of Love of the Game  Open in new Window.
Review by Olivia4285 Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello, {suser: }

I would like to give you a review that will improve and compliment your work using these categories:


Title:

I thought the title was not too revealing but still explained the story


Characters:
I like Danny's personality, it was interesting.

Setting:
The setting was regular and yet different at the same time.


Theme:
I've already said, it's great, the theme of a game that some boys played.

Overall impression:
I like all the language features and think this is a great short story. *Smile*



-Olivia4285
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Review of July Morning  Open in new Window.
Review by Olivia4285 Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello, booklover3 Author Icon

I would like to give you a review that will improve and compliment your work using these categories:


Title:

I thought the title explained the piece well, and it was nice, short and simple.

Language Features: You included great adjectives, and a bit of alliteration (food fun and fireworks) which was good.

Theme:
I like how you wrote about families celebrating their freedom and about the fireworks. You wrote this beautifully.

Overall impression:
You wrote a nice little poem about families coming together and I found not one mistake. I also like how the couplet at the start rhymed.



-Olivia4285
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Review of Midnight Hour  Open in new Window.
Review by Olivia4285 Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello, ~WhoMe???~ Author Icon

I would like to give you a review that will improve and compliment your work using these categories:


Title:

I thought the title was really nice and simple and relevant to the poem.

Theme: I really like this theme. It's different and eerie and I also love the fantasy.


Overall impression:
This piece is a wonderful little piece and I love the beautiful language that has been used. *Smile*



-Olivia4285
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Review of Threads of Gold  Open in new Window.
Review by Olivia4285 Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, {suser:chrissiej }

I would like to give you a review that will improve and compliment your work using these categories:


Title: I like this title as it is different but short and explains in a minimum of words what is in the context.

Characters:
I think this poem is sweet, and it sounds as if you really love your sister.

Theme:
I like how you wrote about your sister's wedding; most people would just write about their own enjoyment.

Overall impression:
I LOVE this poem, it made me feel as if my sister had been married!



-Olivia4285
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Review of My Happy Place  Open in new Window.
Review by Olivia4285 Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
I entered this contest as well- and it looks like I have some competition! I really like the start about all the flowers and the aroma... I like how you included information about the place- like what they do during holiday season. I like the metaphor as well.
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Review of The Chase  Open in new Window.
Review by Olivia4285 Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
This story is really lovely- I'm even liking the name of Chase! I like how you described nearly everything, and you used interesting words too. I like how you had the lesson, or moral, at the end. My favourite part was when Chase licked your son, and how delighted he was.
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Review by Olivia4285 Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
I really enjoyed this poem, it is not very often that you get a beautiful poem about sleeping. Did you really sing in your sleep???
I like the way that you described dreaming, you even have some alliteration! (zeal and zest) I also like how it ended.
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Review of A Lost Cause  Open in new Window.
Review by Olivia4285 Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
This is just like a blurb on the back of a book- it hooks you in and makes you want to read it! I'm dying to know what will happen next! I think if you wrote this out in full it could make a great story. I like the way you could make such a small piece of writing tell so much information.
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Review of A Glowing Purpose  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I really like this poem, there is such gorgeous language used.
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Review by Olivia4285 Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
This was a really creative idea, I certainly would never have thought of it! A bit sad where Bobo died at the end.... I like how this story is set in the future, most stories aren't and it's good to read something different. Maybe you could write a sequel where the main character teaches all people to laugh?
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Review by Olivia4285 Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
I thought this was a good idea, another hunger games. You explained it well and it fits with the original book.
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Review by Olivia4285 Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
I love the rich language in this piece, and how it links back together at the end. I also like how each paragraph starts the same way, and the ending is nice too. I rate this 5 stars!
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