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Review of Untitled  Open in new Window.
Review by KingKinky Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hello,

I liked it made me think of a while ago when I would start a story, mainly a fanfiction, and never finish. Just having bits and parts of what could have had a great potential to capture a reader's attention.

And the way I used the word like to describe the text would be as in I would like to see more and may even read a longer story if it was to play out. Please keep up writing even if it is just small drafts like this.

Goodbye and stay gold.
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Review of Candy  Open in new Window.
Review by KingKinky Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello. I read your poem 'Candy' and found it simple and even sweet (I'm funny).

It can connect with everyone about something we all know and love. A treat to bring us back to the times we didn't have a care in the world. This poem is well written, only one thing I would say annoyed me was how it said,

'Inside the shop is warm,
Outside is a brewing storm.'

The lines remind me of the song 'sweater weather' by The Neighborhood. Yes they do not own the idea a place or person can make you feel a bad time as a storm feel warmer the lines may make it seem you lack a bit of creativity.

Overall I like the poem and it made me a bit happier than I was. Please keep up your work and maybe I will end up reviewing another writing by you. Goodbye and Stay gold.
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