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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
The only major problem I can see in this story is that you change tense - most of the story is past tense until this sentence - "I glared at her for a few moments, then I took a breath and think about the flowers" - and from then on it's present tense. Be careful about that. But overall, I thought it was cute and creative. Keep writing!
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is an excellent read! This was one of the few 5s that I have rated. I really and truly enjoyed reading it. The writing flowed, the story line was intriguing, and the flashbacks were well placed and pertinent. It was a very sweet story. Keep writing!
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