Reading this, I can imagine some adorable little boy running around, getting weirded out by all the blue. This is so realistic of something a little kid would actually do. It really captures a small child's innocent, imaginative state of mind. Great job!
I really like the intense, descriptive wording here. I love the line "love bends without breaking"; this can be applied to many situations. This poem is obscure and unique (which is a very good thing). I can sense the feeling and emotion you put into this; good job!
This is really good; it makes me think of meeting some amazing person for the first time. I like the flowy rhythm of this for the most part. My only minor complaint is that the last line reads a bit awkwardly. I think it would sound more flowy if it said "leaving me feeling invincible" or maybe "leaving me to feel invincible" but it's your poem, you have the right to do whatever you want to it. Again, great job! I love this!
Good poem; there are so many people that seem like they have it all together, when really they're miserable. I think a lot of people can relate to this. Beautiful ending! Great job on this!
This is an amazing poem! It makes me think about all the great things aborted babies might achieve if only they were given the chance to live. The ending made me all happy and hopeful. :) I loved it, great job!
This is a great poem! Making the earth seem human, especially making it seem like a child, makes one more concerned with protecting the planet. Good job!
This is a really great poem about respecting people's choices, even if they're different from yours. It makes more sense the second time you read it; the second half of this seems more clear to me than the first, but after rereading it, the whole things makes more sense. I love how it almost seems like the person is furiously yelling at someone: "DON'T ANALYZE ME! THEY'RE ALL MY THOUGHTS! THEY CAN'T BE RENTED, THEY CAN'T BE BOUGHT!" Good job; keep writing!
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