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Review by Dave Bullis Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
RedtoWrite,
Not too bad. I see what your point of the story was, the main character is shown how if she keeps on her current or about to be current path she may end up like Donnie or worse. She was lucky once, but may not be so lucky again.
I like the main characters development because it seems, she - has a past drinking problem,- has a past pill problem, - has a caring, sarcastic husband.
I just wished I knew WHY Donnie, tried Methadone in the first place. You say he was successful for 5 years, maybe his business was in a decline? Maybe even though he saw the victims of heroin addiction, he thought he could beat it?
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Review by Dave Bullis Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
Princess,
There was just a few grammer issues;
" Looking up at the dark sky I knew it was just 4:30 p.m." Did you mean a.m.?
"My peer tormented me" did you mean peer's? And just a few other grammar problems, here and there.
Storyline was decent, a man is scared my a reflecting he sees. This could easily be made into a twilight zone episode. I just wonder, how old this man is & how long has he avoided his own reflection. I could take the story meaning, since he avoided mirrors for so long, his own reflection troubles him because he doesnt know the man looking back at him. But if that is true, how did he avoid his reflection for so long? Sorry, maybe I'm reading too much into this. Good job & keep writing.
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