Wonderful poem, I loved it. Great ideas, a lot of feeling in there that comes through really well. Apart from a couple small grammatical errors I'd say that this is tottaly perfect. One of the best pieces I've read in a while. Nice job!
Very nice, good imagery, interesting concept, great ideas. No real complaints, at times the rhyming sequence seems a tad forced but really overall, great job.
I like this poem, I really love the idea and the description, your word use is also great. My only complaints are that the rhyme sequence feels a little.... Forced I guess, and you don't seem to follow through with it for the entire poem, it seems like you can't decide whether you'd like to stick with your orignal form and when we expect a rhyme and we don't get one and visa verca.. Also there are a couple points where you repeat yourself that kinda bother me and break up the flow a little bit such as:
From high’ to the sands of low tide,
In summer’ salmon boats work their patches’
Netting two hours from low tide,
Here where you use low tide twice in such close proximity it just makes the poem feel a little halted.
Once again, love the ideas, keep writing!
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