Nixie 🦊's (nixie9) Reviews

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Review Style

Template most of the time, covering setting/plot/characters/conflict/resolution if applicable. For shorter works, I concentrate more on feelings evoked.

I'm good at...

Short story, chapter reviews and in-depth reviews.

Favorite Genres

Sci-fi, Romance, mystery, children's

Least Favorite Genres

Historical

Favorite Item Types

Short stories, novel chapters

Least Favorite Item Types

essay, editorial, non-fiction, somebody's homework assignment

I will not review...

XGC, poems, prose. I am an animal activist and vegan, so cruelty or violent, unnecessary, death due to negligence is overwhelming. I am unable to review any pieces involving abuse of any kind to anyone. I like to keep my corner or the world happy, because I grew beyond my "challenges" of childhood and don't want to look back.

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#4800850

Review of Windshield Wasp

Review by Nixie 🦊

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Rated: ASR

| (5.0)

This review is a gift to you from "disABILITY WRITERS GROUP"

Greetings, Than Pence I found your item via the read and review tab.

Favorite line

Does your family miss you? Are you causing them pain?

Overall Impression
Favorite line

Oh my gosh, "Windshield Wasp" was both comical and compassionate. The rhythmic pattern of the words and verses created a flowing read that was delightful. How many of us personify insects and worry about their welfare?

Your poem captured my heart, and I read it over and over again. At least the rain interfered, still leaving the MC to doubt, but ultimately, the wasp blew away beyond the MC's control, and he/she was saved from making a decision.

I couldn't have wiped it away, either. Imagine the mess.

Emotions evoked/personal connection
To keep my kids quiet, I made up silly stories similar to this one. There was a bug clinging to my car as we drove to the mall. I made a joke of it, saying it was too lazy to fly anywhere by itself. I was lucky as well. After half-an-hour it finally flew away.

If you've ever watched "Men in Black" a bug flies light years to reach earth, only to land on a truck's windshield and be smeared off. I skip past that scene.

Parting comments
Congratulations on your win. It's well-deserved. Keep writing.

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#4800767

Review of Dementia

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

Greetings, lucky dog I found your item while cruising through random reviewing.

Overall impression
Easily relatable

"Dementia" actually caused me to wonder about myself. I have all the same symptoms, but think mine are caused by another illness. It's frightening when I can't express myself, when I respond incorrectly, only to realize days later when it no longer matters.

I cope with a high level of anxiety, and this is most prevalent when I feel vulnerable, usually at a doctor's office when a precise response is required. Often, I bring my daughter to help me listen and understand.

There's a million times when confusion reigns. I forget the day, date, hour...etc. Sometimes, I don't recognize myself, I'm too distant from reality. My doctor is fantastic and helps me by administering the correct medications.

Despite the similarities, I don't believe I have dementia.

Observations/oops
I have a friend who’s significant other...
(whose)

Lasting impression
I had a neighbor with full-blown dementia, but his plight is a really long story. A small point--he was always petting a dog by his side. A dog who didn't exist.

"Dementia" was a true recounting that was expressed in a manner easy to follow. I feel a sadness for anyone who is aging with difficulties, but I guess that's life. We never know what may happen.

Thank you for sharing and giving me the chance to relate my own experiences.

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#4800452

Review of Literacy

Review by Nixie 🦊

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

Salutations and Congratulations Elycia Lee ☮ Done for I'm stopping by again with another anniversary review.

HAPPY 23rd WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM

"Anniversary Reviews"

My favorite line
Indulging in a secret world to tell
everyone your fantasy.

Overall Impression
I'm always fascinated by poetry since I'm just diving into that literacy pool again. Everyone has different styles that I can learn from.

My decision to take on your poem came because it was well-presented. The topic was also of interest to me. I can imagine living inside something I write, poem or story. In fact, I wrote a novelette that I refuse to publish because I like my characters so much I don't want to share them.

I've heard it said that people should be nice to writers, else they wind up as a bad character in a poem or story. I can think of a few in my life...in fact, I've used a few awful people. One is deceased, so I shouldn't be writing ill of the dead, but in my defense, he was alive when I wrote it. Also, it was cathartic for me.

Stand-outs
When you mentioned villains, I was thinking about how much I'd like to write a story about a villain who turns his life around, and becomes a good guy.

Thoughts to think
I wasn't quite sure what the second line in the first stanza meant. Neither did I understand 'fingering expressions'. Were you referring to how to show a character?

Closing remarks
I thought the message was cute. What a wondrous world it would be to hide in one's own story and feel free.

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#4800430

Review of Two Parts Blood, One Part Fire

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Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

Salutations and Congratulations Jeff

HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM

"Anniversary Reviews"

22 years of membership and still actively involved in the community. I'm impressed.

Overall Impression
Excellent set up for this action/adventure story, although I think that paragraph should be broken up with some spacing. The details are tantamount to understanding the story, and with more spacing, it would be easier to appreciate your set-up. Maybe paragraph at "Upon first glance..."

Sneaky...sneaky and deceptive. I was rooting for the Zava Priests, before even knowing what the war was about. I liked the idea of having one place for all battles. Sheesh. These two cultures must fight all the time. Later in the story, the reader learns the truth.

Stand-outs
Good point. As I say, 'All men have war in their hearts.'
"Such is the way of men," Raza said...

What? You really caught me off guard.
Raza and Raith both unfurled their wings and pushed off the ground..

Even though it's a common phrase, sometimes those phrases are necessary to quickly orient the reader through familiarity.
And then all hell broke loose.

A thought to ponder
Unless they miss their target, aren't all assassins lethal?
... presumably by one of Abergast's lethal assassins.

This sentence could use some restructuring to avoid the word felt.
Raith (felt) lightheaded; it (felt) like his world was spinning off its axis.

Closing remarks
Shocking conclusion, to say the least! I had a blast reading "Two Parts Blood, One Part Fire."

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#4800412

Review of The Time Machine

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

Salutations and Congratulations Mary Ann MCPhedran

HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM

"Anniversary Reviews"

Ooo..a decade of membership celebration!

Overall Impression
Oh, time travel always grabs my attention. Sci-fi is my favorite genre. Which brings me to a sticky point. Going forward

Be certain to use all three categories available when choosing genres. Members won't be looking for 'other', and you're missing an opportunity to secure a Quill.

Ouch! I bet you've heard this exactly four times. The font color and size make "The Time Machine" almost unreadable. Again, something to think about going forward.

Stand-outs
I was waiting for the promised time travel as indicated in the title. It's the very last sentence, but I feel that I should have guessed this. The key lies in the description of the car's interior.
Swoosh the car was taking them somewhere.

This was a quick story and had only a bit of build-up with no real challenge for the character. All she had to do was wait.

I didn't get a feeling for either character. They were laid out like flat cardboard, merely going through the actions, while the unassuming plot seemed to carry the story.

Definitely consider evening out the spacing.

What does this mean? Who is both? Who is the attendant?
The cover was pulled back and the attendant and both said at the same time

A car fits in a box?

Was this phrasing deliberate? Or did you mean (I think so.)
'I thinks so.'

Closing remarks
I think you have an excellent chance to pump up the action in your story. I understand it was written years ago, so once again, I'm providing a suggestion for going forward. Keep writing!

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#4800166

Review of Know How to Stand

Review by Nixie 🦊

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

Salutations and Congratulations Mousethyme

HAPPY 9th WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM

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Overall Impression
"Know How to Stand" is a deeply personal piece, touching on the murky world of mental illness and the general incompetence of psychiatrists. That part was easy to relate to. It was years before I finally found a doctor who correctly diagnosed me. Once I adjusted to the new and correct meds, it was easier to be me. I've resented those meds for years, believing they masked the true me. How messed up was that? The meds allow me to be me. I have to respect them and allow for the side effects.

Stepping out of my life and back into yours, I appreciated how you explained what specific stanzas mean to you. There's reference to 'looking back' and seeing the times when you've fallen and chose to stand up. I've been in the dark for so long, I can't remember a moment like that. It's okay. I'm fine with who I am. If I'm dark, I'm dark. I do try to bring light into my life for the sake of others.

Considerations
More space, please. From the inserted video going down, the first line is almost invisible. As the work continues, the words in that entire paragraph are crammed together. I think that's the most important part of this piece.

You know this is an easy fix, if you so desire. A larger font and more space is all it would take.

I've looked back at some of my older works and cringed because I didn't think about increasing font size for easier readability.

Closing remarks
Trust me, there are no 'functional families' but some are worse than others.
You are brave to share this intimate piece with the community. Thanks for showing me a little bit of 'you.'

Nixie
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#4800155

Review of Little Raindrop

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

Salutations and Congratulations God Moving Over The Waters....

HAPPY 14th WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM

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Overall Impression
"Little Raindrop" grants the reader a respite from frenzied life to pause and reflect on something tiny, demonstrated in colourful words. The existence of a raindrop as a single entity is something I've never considered before. I'm reaching deep into my memory for a storm that began with one drop. Life has to begin somewhere—both in nature and in humanity. Each with its own heartbeat.

I found your formatting interesting. When I compose poetry, if a line is a continuing thought, I do not capitalize the first letter of the next. Here, you've capitalized all lines and eschewed punctuation. Anything goes in poetry, yes? Author's license and all that.

Stand-outs
If raindrops have no regrets, I'd want to be one. Overcoming regret is considered the most difficult emotion for humans to process.

What does rain smell like? Silly me. I had to Google it. The smell of rain is 'earthy' so says the AI generated response. Since the second line in that stanza has an observation using that word, I'd be hard-pressed to offer something different. And the more I think about it, the dumber I feel for even making this observation.

Closing remarks
I like reviewing because the task teaches and shows me various ways to write and format. "Little Raindrop" is a sweet and gentle poem that relaxed me.

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#4800129

Review of June's Race Against Time

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

Salutations and Congratulations Jeannie☃️

HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM

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Overall Impression
Great job, Jeannie. "June's Race Against Time" had me laughing all the way through. The cover art showed your exact story, but, of course, the fun was in the plot. Poor June. I imagined her skirt ripped up at least one side. At least that didn't happen to her.

I enjoyed the various ways you found to describe her plight without repetition. Each scene was different, and all the mishaps fell neatly into place. Sheesh. What an inconsiderate police officer. Even receiving a warning is annoying.

I had no appreciation for the dumb blonde comment. Just sayin. with a grimace on my face.

Just a quick note
alright
is a word often used in dialogue. But it's not really a word. 'All right' is the correct way to spell it.

Stand-outs
I was impressed when the boss agreed to wait another day for June's presentation. She must be highly regarded as an employee. Also, mentioning the value of her shoe gave me the impression that she was wealthy.

Her colleagues were kind, not crude or rude as I expected. Even Stan backed off with a shrug.

And...all the characters had individual dialogue and actions. I felt as if I knew them all.

How did June get around with only one shoe? Shouldn't she have kicked the other one off?

Closing remarks
Quick sharing moment. Once, on the way to a doctor's appointment, my Z28 engine wouldn't turn over. I had no time to wait for Triple A, and after a few more tries, the engine engaged. So, I drove to my appointment, and when I arrived, I parked the car outside my doctor's window and left the engine running in fear that my beloved Z would betray me again.

Thanks for the laugh, and for the opportunity to relate one of my favorite personal memories.

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#4799953

Review of A Narrow Escape.

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

Salutations and Congratulations The Sun SmilesOn Small Valley

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Overall Impression
I have never tried writing a 55 word story, as the task seemed beyond my talents. "A Narrow Escape" in both title and content, is a superlative example. The first sentence alerts the reader to the possibility of danger. Then we have a glimpse of where the problem may be, although the reader must wait for the second paragraph to see the actual danger previously hinted at.

Smart MC, knowing enough to check underneath the car door. I remember being told (as a woman) to always look under my car as I approached to see if anyone was hiding there. Also, just in case we forgot to lock the car door (unlikely) check the back seat for a predator. This advice came from long ago, when cars still had locks and keys. And locks could be jimmied.

Stand-outs
The italic font lent a certain unease, which worked well for the story.

Closing remarks
Fantastic and swift, yet exciting, conclusion. Great job for winning!

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#4799942

Review of Forever Love

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

Salutations and Congratulations Alexandra

HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM

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Overall Impression
I liked "Forever Love" because the tree played a large role in the romance.

The formatting was confusing, and there seemed to be an authorial intrusion. The story begins as a short story, after which there are a few paragraph breaks. That's where it felt as if the writer was speaking of themselves.

After reading it three times, perhaps that section is being 'spoken' by the MC. Some clarity there would be nice.

Suggestions
Remember, all punctuation belongs inside the quotation marks. I think the rules are the same on both sides of the pond.

‘You have all the qualities I imagined I would have in a man’.

Correct me if I'm wrong. In the beginning, I automatically pegged the MC as a woman, which makes the above a confusing sentence.

Wrapping it up
Predictable but sweet conclusion. Keep writing!

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#4799348

Review of Decomposition

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Rated: ASR

| (5.0)

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Reviewing "Decomposition"

Erika

Overall Impression
As I read "Decomposition" thoughts ran through my head, mingling with yours. It seems we have a similar outlook. I want to be cremated, not buried in a box. Your take on dying was extremely poetic, an excellent rendition of how you'd like to be consumed by the earth.

Otherwise, although now impossible, I'd like to be placed in a tree where I can decompose naturally, allowing nature to take its course. As did the Native Americans.

Stand-outs
This line made me ponder over how our bodies reunite with the earth, fingers as tree roots, giving back, when normally humans only take.
Perhaps I'd grow small green fingers
between the ivory ones..."

Closing remarks
I really liked the closing lines. The thought of being trapped inside a body is spot-on, especially if one's body image doesn't match how the person feels inside.

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#4799315

Review of And They Call us Children

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

Reviewing "And They Call us Children"

Elby Wordsmith

Overall Impression
I'm sad to say "And They Call us Children" struck a deep chord within me. In this poem, we listen to the children's perceptions, and they are valid. Not all parents treat their kids this way.

They don't weaponize them, rather they agonize over what their children must be feeling, and wonder how to explain the break-up. At this very moment, one of my daughters is going through this tragedy. The situation is untenable, with no way to escape in sight.

Favorite stanza?
Although all the stanzas were provocative and heart-wrenching, the 11th stood out to me as the best—the 'kids caught in a cage' was especially moving.

Although free verse has no rules, some of the stanzas differed in syllables enough to be a distraction. Now, reviewers have made the same remark regarding my free verse poems. Sometimes I'm resentful, but at other times, I reflect. I'm only passing on some advice I received. Take it for what it's worth. I never changed any of my free verses.

Oops
A few mistakes gave me pause, but nothing so significant so as to cause me distress.

Final observations
I mentioned a few mistakes here and there, but they were pronounced in the final stanza, which was a real shame. The poem had so much to offer and reflect upon, I was upset to see it end in this fashion.

Otherwise, well done. The author brought the reader straight into the dilemma with their words and thoughts.

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Review of Survival

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

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Reviewing "Survival"

bas

Overall Impression
A desperate story about the unlikelihood of a rescue after (hiking?) partners fall into an animal trap, draws the reader in from the first line. Good job. The desperate situation escalated as the vultures lurked. This effectively showed the reader just how awful Jeannie and Sid's plight was. The two were definitely on the brink of dying.

It sounds as if they were both caught in the same trap. How would that be possible? If they were so badly injured, how could they climb out with the help of a rope, tossed down by friends?

Oops
For anniversary reviews, as they are for celebrating, I don't specifically point out all the individual mistakes I encounter. Summing up the mishaps, here's a few. Punctuation belongs inside quotation marks. Commas and periods are missing. Jeanie's name is misspelled in places. Okay, that's all I'm typing.

Closing remarks
Nice tie-in with the shouting "Get lost" directed at the vultures, when it was the friends coming to rescue them.

Reminder, I am but one person with an opinion.

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#4799295

Review of Siblings

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews"

Reviewing "Siblings"

👼intuey

Overall Impression
"Siblings" was a relatable poem for me. I grew up with three brothers, and a sister, who died when she was thirty. Each brother had different impacts on my life. My protector and now best friend was the oldest. The middle brother terrorized me, and not in a funny or teasing way, my youngest brother annoyed me.

Unlike the brother in this poem, he didn't want to bust in on all my escapades with friends, thankfully.

No laughing, but in the beginning, and at other moments (especially being chased with a broom) I thought maybe this story was about a dog. Eventually, I abandoned my misconception.

Stand-outs
I've never heard of a 'list poem' so I appreciated the explanation. Without that clarification, I was mystified by the formatting.

You knocked this challenge out of the ballpark. Well done.

Closing remarks
The second stanza made me feel better. The first lines were a total reversal as opposed to prior experiences. Those memories were palpable for me, as I imagined the crunch of shared popcorn, and the mutual appreciation of a movie.

The closing stanza turned everything around again, and that was the clincher to the success of your poem. I enjoyed every minute while reading this. At the conclusion, a twist in the literal sense. Well done!

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#4799281

Review of Friday Nights

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Rated: 13+

| (4.0)

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Reviewing "Friday Nights"

Barefoot Bob

Overall Impression
Fantastic first paragraph that insured my continued interest.

I liked how closely "Friday Nights" summed up a teenager's obsession and fear as they observed one girl. The 'clasping a Pepsi' brilliantly demonstrated this person's position as a wall-floor. I've been there myself. Not in silent admiration, more in fear and lack of self-confidence, hope singing in my brain, waiting for someone to notice me.

Nit-picking
While allowing for the author's largess, I was nonetheless distracted by the capitalization of SHE and HER. Those words jumped off the page and nearly spoiled my enjoyment while relating to the story (thus the 4 star ranking). I wish SHE had a name to break up that pattern.

More pickiness. I don't think the Hmmmm added anything of worth to the story. Maybe 'she didn't turn into a salt pillar' as the Bible story related, would have created a stronger, less offensive conclusion. Half-joking here.

Closing remarks
In the end, the reader sees the goddess reduced to someone fat. I understand why this part was included, the HER was reduced in value due to her weight gain. Is that what made her approachable, when before SHE could only be admired from a distance? I found that tremendously sad and slightly offensive.

Otherwise, a splendid read that evoked memories of the distant past. I think my hearing was damaged by sitting so close to the band's speakers.

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Review of Reviewing Advice Forum

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews"

Reviewing "Reviewing Advice Forum"

Lornda

Overall Impression
First, the page itself looks organized, inviting, and interesting. A lot of information is offered here, yet since it's well-presented, it's relatively easy to follow. A reader may even pick or choose according to the drop down menus that keep the page neat and accessible. The instructions are explicit, most notably informing the reader that we are not offering mentoring.

Even though the article is focused on newbies, any reviewer can benefit from what is offered here.

Stand-outs
The complimentary font colors and the font size make the page pop.

The cover image placed at the top of the forum draws the eye and clearly shows what is to follow. Nice image!

Closing remarks
I'm shocked to find something in your portfolio that I haven't (or could not) review.

If anyone is running a newbie item, perhaps you can ask if your article can be attached. Your work needs to be front and center!

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#4799026

Review of Outer - Somewhere - here he comes

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Rated: ASR

| (4.0)

"What a Character! : Official WDC Contest"
Official Judge's Review

Greetings, THANKFUL SONALI Love my family. Thanks for entering the contest. It's my privilege to review your story.

Overall impression
Interesting take on the prompt. Two brothers in their fifties, one ready to step away from his family, the other deciding he would use the same tactics and secure the position. His justification? He was older.

Thoughts from the ledge
I never expected to make a negative remark about white space, but the amount in this story broke up the flow.

Connection
I had to laugh when the brothers were discussing who to ask. In my family, I knew what my dad would say 'yes' to and my mom would say 'no' to. And visa versa.

Lapse of attention ▼

A clever take on the prompt that shows the dynamics of a certain family, and the dreams of the brothers.

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#4799023

Review of I Am Home

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

Official Judge's Review

Greetings, Amethyst Agape Angel. Thanks for your entry.

The draw
The creepy eye turned me off, and I didn't understand how it related to the plot. The brief description didn't seem to relate, either.

Criteria
Everything looked just right, answering the prompt in an effective way.

The main character
After showing the reader Marie's dismal world and awful husband, you pulled the reader through Marie's plans for advancement. I knew it was too good to be true, but even when Marie learned this, she was strong enough not to return to her former life.

She was an authentic character and easy to like.

The mood
Outstanding and original word choices set the mood, ranging from frustration to exploring, and finally to triumph. Nicely done-tying in the beginning with the end, completing the story arc.

The frosting
Who can resist reading a story with a larger font and plenty of white space? The presentation was flawless.

Parting thoughts
Excellent work here.

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~Nixie
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#4799022

Review of A New Canvas

Review by Nixie 🦊

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

Greetings, WriterRick Thanks for your entry.
"What a Character! : Official WDC Contest"
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Overall impression
I liked your main character and her ambition to start all over again. She didn't allow doubt from any coworkers to dissuade her.

There was enough sensory output to fill a believable setting. I liked the vibrant details and the implications of the title.

Suggestions
A larger font would make it easier to read. This review was written using a size 4 font.

Adherence to prompt
Margaret chooses to leave her 40 year career as a teacher and follow her heart. She has a rough go at first, creating a realistic response to her decision. Through her connections, she successfully pulls off a somewhat painting career.

Stand-outs
"But now, she was writing a new story, one brushstroke at a time."
"Your work has heart. People will connect with it."

Final impression
A heart-warming story that was calm and understated when writing a story about a change of career. Well done!

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Nixie
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#4799021

Review of Pushed Against the Wall

Review by Nixie 🦊

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Rated: 18+

| (3.5)

"What a Character! : Official WDC Contest"
Official Judge's Review

Greetings, Prof Moriarty

. Thanks for your entry. Please remember, mine is but one opinion. I'll be careful with your story.

Overall impression
This was very much a cultural piece. If I'm correct, women accept abuse from their spouses. I've seen it happen before, but I could be wrong.

Adherence to prompt
The story doesn't directly answer the prompt. Nudrath orchestrated the change herself. That didn't exactly hit right with my interpretation of the prompt. She's not leaving a job and entering a new situation. Although being married to that man was a job.

Oops
Show bitterness rather than attach the adverb to a dialogue tag.
“How could the bitch skip her pills!” he thought bitterly.

Use italics to show thinking. How could the bitch skip her pills. For clarification, you could add, 'he thought.'

‘Ok, bitch,” he said with a broad smile.
"Okay, bitch...(missing correct opening quotation marks.)

Stand-outs
With a wicked grin on her pretty face...
This was my favorite visual.

Final impression
I despised the husband and the sons, effectively shown by you. However, I didn't feel anything for Nudrath. Maybe her actions were bold, but that was it. I hope her new life satisfies her.

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#4799012

Review of From Poole to Green Slime

Review by Nixie 🦊

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Rated: 18+

| (3.5)

Greetings, LightinMind. Thanks for your entry.
"What a Character! : Official WDC Contest"
Official Judge's Review

Please remember, my opinion is but one of many.

Overall impression
Due to the many footnotes, the story lost its steam. I have the feeling that this plot is personal to you, or that you had a similar career. But I could be wrong.

The major problem for me was that I felt nothing, no attachment to the character, nothing to drive the plot forward. The story was rich with details and information, but I didn't learn much about the character, or his struggles.

Lapse of attention caused repetition.
...stared down into the gully below. It was a 150-foot drop and he could not see if there were rocks beneath the waters of the pool below.

Consider working in some internal dialogue and adding a sense of danger. One example:
Lieutenant Roger Courtney stared down into the gully below. That must be at least a 150 foot drop, and if there's rocks under the water, I'll die.

Adherence to prompt
There was a career change that worked better for Roger, especially considering his age.

Final impression
Too many details slowed the plot and stole the excitement of a challenge.

The title of the story is enticing and it sounded like humour.

The brief description explains the story. No drama. Characters need challenges and conflicts.

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#4799011

Review of The Maintenance Man

Review by Nixie 🦊

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Rated: 13+

| (3.5)

Greetings, Damon Nomad

Thanks for entering

"What a Character! : Official WDC Contest"
Official Judge's Review

Enter the realm
Who was the star in this story? Jerry seemed to be more talked about than actually having a living part in this story. It's tough to write about a writing career. I'd need to know more about Jerry, hear from him more to form an attachment. He only returned to writing because he had promised his wife. Yes, that fits the prompt. but I expected to read something more active.

Walk down the corridors
From the beginning, I expected to read about Clarence's devotion to religion. He found comfort in the Bible, which didn't make much sense.

Dust Bunnies/oops
A confusing sentence
It's interesting what he would explain when people ask him what he had done for a living

Shut the door
I felt sad that Clarence never learned of his success. I wanted that to be a prominent part of the plot. The reader needs to know how the change affected played out in the person's life.

Thanks again for entering!

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#4799009

Review of My life was a circus!

Review by Nixie 🦊

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

Wandering Thoughts
Thanks for your entry. "What a Character! : Official WDC Contest"
Official Judge's Review

Overall Impression
"My Life was a Circus" shows the reader your difficulties and triumphs over various changes. Congrats for always landing on your feet, despite the circumstances. I happen to be a fan of short or incomplete sentences because they're powerful. It also brings the reader closer to the author.

Sounds real fair right?

Not being fairly compensated was surely frustrating. When the accounting flipped to the aftermath, I was shocked.

Room for improvement

My boss who's role I assumed (whose)

Punctuation
"My Life was a Circus" > no exclamation mark in the title.

At times, the 'story' was difficult to follow. For example, this run-on sentence that is missing a word.

Every year at the end of the tour I was advised that although I did everything (they) asked they could not pay me as much the next year.

Misplaced adverb
For the next seven months I ran flawlessly flawlessly ran

The closing sentence seemed out of place and unnecessary. The reader knows the author has been conveying their personal story through genre picks and needs no reminder that the bio satisfied the prompt.

Lasting Impression
"My Life was a Circus" left me with a feeling of having something learned. The bio was extensive and presented the author with multiple examples of changing of the times and adaption to adverse or triumphant happenings.

Thanks again for entering this daunting contest.

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#4798408

Review of The Fourth Child

Review by Nixie 🦊

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews"

Reviewing "The Fourth Child"

Octavius

Overall Impression
"The Fourth Child" was a story I could really sink my teeth into. I learned about the MC and her surroundings. Most prominent in my mind? Dana liked the solitude her job provided. How many of us can find a job that actually suits us?

What may have been a tasking read of details suited the story just fine. Not too much, not too little. Good job.

The appearance of the small girl was not intrusive or frightening, which was the creature's intent. I picked up on her ability to communicate telepathically, while Dana was a little slow in her understanding.

As usual, humans are depicted as less than others.

Oops
I found several small mistakes throughout that I won't include here because this is a celebration. No need for downers on an anniversary. Nevertheless, if you'd like specifics, please email me. (Mostly what I noticed were missing periods.)

Closing remarks
The conclusion was beautiful and ethereal, more than just sci-fi. Personally, I consider humans an invasive species, and I was furious that we dug into a planet to provide for us. We take, but do not give. We don't care about what we may be ruining.

A great read with a few lapses of attention.

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#4796555

Review of The Snowflake And The Daffodil

Review by Nixie 🦊

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Rated: ASR

| (5.0)

Hi Brenpoet Congratulations on your 23 years of membership.

Overall impression
Considering the 11 five star ratings, my review and rating will come as no surprise. Still, because death lingers around me, I wanted to read about someone else's experience.

The comments
What we remember after a tragic day is often something simple, yet elegant, as expressed in your poem.

I discovered my favorite stanza was the third, the last two lines.
My life was changed forever (not in a good way) when I found a photo from my childhood.

The rhyming pattern was consistent, although all those commas did distract me. I'm not intending to leave specific comments because this is a personal piece, and after all these years, I doubt any suggestions would be appreciated.

Personal connection
Just a few words here. Anymore and the past climbs over the wall they live behind. My dad and my 30 year old sister. I remember throwing roses on my sisters coffin, knowing they would die just like she did.

Final observations
You handed me your heart in this prose. Thank you.

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