Excellent! Normally I try to leave at least a little critique and this is the only line that threw me off while reading this out loud. In the third line of the last stanza, have you thought of taking out the first 'as'? So it would read One Bee a husband...
So you know how much I liked this, I may have just used it to send on Valentine's Day.
Wow. The vindication and vengeance just flows from this work. I like the use of the number 9 rather than the written form. The only constructive critism I can offer is that you may want to give it another read to pick up a few of the missing spots. For instance, I'm guessing line 5 should be 'it' instead of 'is'.
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