Outstanding job. I agree with you. There HAS to be a fantastic finish to this adventure. There is no way that life is just all over when we leave here. Not to sound morbid, but I am actually kind of excited to experience what happens next. Great job on your poem. Very well written.
Very well written. I feel that you completely captured the essence of yearning for a lost love. The binding desire that commands attraction no matter the length of time invested. Great continuity and structure. This is a very well written poem. Great job.
This is a very well composed moment. Although it falls with a heavy heart and the jagged spears that disappointment lays us open with from time to time; your literary proficiency shows itself evidently. Nice job on this piece of writing that originates from a difficult experience.
Generally this had a good flow to it. Your descriptions were very good. The only little criticism I have is that the building is labled as historical and I assume it to be old, but a half century is only 50 years, just not terribly old in building terms. Otherwise, unique story.
Excellent flow and technique. Your poem makes me feel sorry for you but loss of love is a dagger we are all cut by sooner or later. I definetly think you should keep writing though because your words and feelings flow very smoothly and cohesively. Nice job on this piece.
Wow. That is an unfortunate occurance, but a potential price to pay for participating in love triangles. I am sorry for your loss but I did enjoy your remarkable acclaimation through your poetry. I hope all is well with you now. Good luck and please keep writing.
It was a little off pace for me in the beginning but nice work with the dialouge to bring it all together at the end. Lyra seems to be the simplistic/complicated type. A tough combination to deal with. Good use of adjectives and again nice work on bringing the readers attention back in to correlate this piece. Wonder what's gonna happen when you get home though...
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